IELTS Task I : Housing owned and rented in UK

Appreciate for correction :)

The given chart below shows the information about the housing owned and rented in 1985 and 2005 by British people.

However, the overall growth numbers of housing in UK increased dramatically in over 20 years with fascinating number by 22 per cent increasing.
In 1985, the pie chart also showed private owned housing as the top most percentage by more than 50 per cent while social housing became the least by 10 per cent resident prefer lived there. On the other hand, people who chose for stay in the council rented were 45 percent, and in the private house lived was 25 percent.

The differences of each group member occurred in the next 20 years period. Despite decreasing number of council rented housing, yet there were rising number among trends. Privately owned housing increased to nearly 75 percent while privately rented reached 15 per cent and 5 percent is gained by social housing.

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the proportion of housing owned and rented in the UK


It's not necessary to have a separate sentence to talk about the four sorts of houses involved. Instead, you could merge this sentence with your previous one.


Overall, the house numbers in the UK increased dramatically over 20 years.


This sentence is irrelevant to the chart.


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Again, these two sentences are not related to what the task requires you to do. You should focus on


and


to summarize the information. There's no need to have interpretations or deductions from the given data. Also, pay attention to your grammar.

The two charts present the percentage of housing owned and rented by British people in 1985 and 2005.


This task is about report writing and that involves reporting your observations. Here you do not talk about things that are not graphically presented. Also, you shouldn't write about your conclusions or predictions.

Both dumi and Misterwandering have given you very good advice. Pay attention to those points. Do not write anything that you do not see in the presentation. Do not write your conclusions. Stick to the trends and observations. In addition to what they have said, I also feel you should have another body paragraph with details.


This is wrong grammar and usage both;
rose is the past tense of rise, which means move from a lower position to a higher one. So, you can simply can't say rose down because it violates its meaning. Also the grammatically right form is - "was risen"

"However" is used when you want to state an opposite opinion. This is not appropriate in your overview paragraph here. Also, there's no need to give data in your overview.


There are two pie charts, so you should clarify which chart you are mentioning.


the most popular type


was the least


at 50 per cent


This sentence has several grammatical mistakes.
In 1985, private owned houses took up over 50 per cent of the total number of houses, while the proportion of social housing was the lowest, at 10 per cent.


The charts are not about the people but the percentage of four kinds of houses.


This sentence is really confusing. What do you mean by "rising number among trends"?
Hope this helps!