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IELTS Task 1 : Hydro Electric process



SHanafi 120 / 357  
May 21, 2014   #1
The diagram depicts the process of water use for producing electrical power.

Overall, the process involves various stages beginning from sea water through sophisticated procedures prior to create sufficient electrical energy.

The process is begun when seawater evaporate to form a small cloud as the effect of sun heat. Once the cloud produces rainfalls, such downpour is collected in a reservoir linking with a dam and pumping pipes. To following step, the valve is opened caused the amount of water flows to the turbine below the reservoir and it rotates to produce the electrical current. Pass through the turbine, the water comes onto the shelter and ready to pump back to the reservoir, a circular process occurred.

The electricity made by turbine is transferred to the transformer station over high voltage cables. Moreover, the station is responsible to deliver the demand of domestic and industrial costumer for the electricity through installed cables under the ground.


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KMeghji 8 / 20  
May 21, 2014   #2
The process is begun when seawater evaporate to form a small cloud as the effect of sun heat.

The process begins when the seawater evaporate to form clouds under the affect of solar heat.

suchthe downpour

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eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
May 24, 2014   #3
the process involves various stages ( a comma) beginning from sea water through sophisticated procedures prior to (this is a preposition, not to-infinitive) createcreating/generating sufficient electrical energy.

To following step

omit to | Following steps

the valve is opened

the shut-on valve

Passing through

and is ready

responsible to deliver

for delivering
OP SHanafi 120 / 357  
Jun 3, 2014   #4
this is a preposition, not to-infinitive

how we know the differences between to as stand as preposition and to as infinitive?

because I ever see the using of prior with to, so I do the same
Here the dictionary said
prior to sth
before a particular time or even
example : the weeks prior to her death

be more specific in here - however, it does not mean that you need to write many miniature details

why only sea water? how about the water in the reservoirs?.... do not make mistakes in the body paras

as I observed, the diagram shows evaporation is only comes from sea water and the reservoir function is to collect rain water :((
andial 21 / 48  
Jun 3, 2014   #5
The process is begun when seawater evaporate to form a small cloud as the effect of sun heat

... it is not accurate in this occasion. you may say the process begins when the sunlight hot up the the seawater. :-)..

Once the cloud produces rainfalls

... cloud does not produces rainfalls at all but once cloud cannot accomodate the volume of water which is accumulated in it, raining happens


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