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IBT 'the best epoch in everyones life' - college time



ramtinms 3 / 6  
Jul 19, 2012   #1
Hi
please let me know my mistakes in following essay
thanx a lot .

What is the best years in your life ? For answering this question you will need review your life events. In my view my colledge years was the best time in my life because of serveral respects . I learnt lots of social skills synchronous academic lessons. I found my best friends in my college and suffice it to say that my best life events take a place in that duration.

I think college is the first time you can found yourself independent from family and you must make pivotal decissions for your life . Beside you learn lots of new educational tasks , You have a big oportunity to experiance lots of social situation and you will learn how to treat with others. For instance , I remember that in that age I experianced that when you respects others , they will respect you back.

Thorughout my life , I have been lucky to have a lots of good friend and I found massive percents of them in my college .Usually, people in the same college have same race and culture backround and they can understand each other in a better way. As a case in point I my friendship with Erfun ,one of my favorite friends , is made when we were first grade of colledge . From that age we always tell the truth to each other and It makes our relationship so strong.

The primary reason that I love that time so much is that It reminds me lots of perfect event. Due to being energitic in that age , I done lots of fun but jeopardious activites that are my best memories todays. For instance , I took my father car and drove it without licence . I took my friends and we sang all the way to the Western Park .

To sum up briefly , I tend to say that college years are the best time in my life and I think It is the best epoch in everyones life . If you did not go to the college , you miss a magnifisent part of your life .

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jul 19, 2012   #2
In my view my colled ge years waswere the best time in my life because ofdue to serveral respectsreasons. [quote=ramtinms]

I learnt lots of social skills synchronoustogether with academic lessons. [/quote]
OP ramtinms 3 / 6  
Jul 19, 2012   #3
thanks a lot ! what is your opinion about other paragraphs ?
April April 13 / 147  
Jul 19, 2012   #4
can found yourself => can FIND yourself
independent from => independent OF
decissions => DECISIONS (spelling)
Beside => BesideS
experiance => experiEnce (spelling)
lots of social situation => lots of social situationS (I think this sentence is not clear enough)
treat with others => leave out WITH
I think you can connect the last 2 sentences of the 2nd para like this: "... treat with others, AS when you RESPECT (no "s") others ..." or revise the last sentence.

Also I think you need to write a topic sentence for the 2nd para.

Best
OP ramtinms 3 / 6  
Jul 19, 2012   #5
April April
thanks a lot April


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