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Toefl ibt essay: Work in team or independently (preferable)


Coolmam9x 4 / 6  
Jun 14, 2011   #1
Task: Is it more important to be able to ework with a group of people on ta tem or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

My essay:

Nowadays, as the world is getting smaller, we need to be able to cooperate. Working in team is a necessary skill that every individual must master for success. Despite the importance of working in team, I still believe that the capability of working independly is more significant.

Of course, effective cooperation can make things easier and faster, but in many important cases when team-working is not possible, the ability to work alone will help. The apperant example is that there are a lot of tests that do not allow team-working. Let's imagine that you perform really well when you can discuss the problems with other people, but you have no experience of working alone, standardized tests such as SAT, TOEFL may be your nightmares. Testing is a very important aspect of life, and still the majority of tests do not allow you to work in team. Therefore, if you want to get brilliant achievements such as going to college, acing your school's final tests, you should consider learning to work on your own.

Moreover, the ability to work alone will help you increase your ability to work with other people. Working in team does not mean that you do not have to come up with your ideas. Everybody in a team must have his/her own opinion first, then discuss them with other members. When we work in team, we still think individually because our brain are not connected but separate. When everyone in a team can come up with his/her own ideas, working in team will definitely more effective.

In conclusion, working with a group a people and working individually are all important. Both skills are necessary for a successful life. Nevertheless, the capablity of working alone is the foundation for the skill to work in team and plays a significant role in a lot of situations.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jun 14, 2011   #2
Of course, effective cooperation can make things easier and faster, but in many important casesinstances when team-working is not possible, the ability to work alone will helpon your own would be the only solution . Theapperant A very common example is that there are a lot oftestsmajority examinationsthat do not allow team-workingcandidates to answer collaboratively. Let's imagine that you perform really well when you can discuss the problems with other peoplestudy in a group , but you have no experience of working alone.Then, faring at the standardized tests such as SAT, TOEFL may be your nightmaresa nightmare for you .

While reading this part, I couldn't help asking myself that why not group studies help students fare well at the exams which are based on individual assessment. In my case, my study group encouraged and motivated me to prepare for such exams and it helped me perform better at the exams. Had I tried to study only on my own, it would have been really boaring. However, I think this depends on one's persoanl preferences. There are people who get energized when they study in groups while others prefer studing on their own. The benefits of studying alone are;

* you can work according to your own study plan without having disturbed by other members in the group
*you become more confident about solving problems without others support
*you dont have to share resources(e.g. lecture notes, assignments, books etc.) with other students
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Moreover, the ability to work alone will help you increase your ability to work with other people. Working in team does not mean that you do not have to come up with your ideas. Everybody in a team must have his/her own opinion first, then discuss them with other members. When we work in team, we still think individually because our brain are not connected but separate. When everyone in a team can come up with his/her own ideas, working in team will definitely more effective.----------This is a very valid poind. A Good para
OP Coolmam9x 4 / 6  
Jun 15, 2011   #3
Thank you very much dumi
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 15, 2011   #4
Hey, I like that argument! This is a meaningful essay, because not everyone would agree with your argument. Yet, it is a strong argument!

I feel that a sentence is missing from the end of the first paragraph. You acknowledged that cooperation is important, and then you mentioned that individual ability is still more important. After that, add a sentence to the end of the paragraph. Make it a thesis statement that expresses the main idea of the essay.

Try to capture your message in a single sentence and add it to the end of the first paragraph.

:-)

One more correction:
Working on a team does not mean that you do not have to come up with your own ideas.

Everybody on a team must ...


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