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The idea of using a standardized national curriculum in the entire nation



sy9891 1 / 1  
Nov 27, 2017   #1
Nation should require all of its students to study same national curriculum until they enter college

the same kind of education for everyone?



The idea of using a standardized national curriculum in the entire nation seems appealing, as the same study material is available to all the students. This ensures that various type of schools-government(central, state, municipal), private and not for profit, all offer the same kind of education. Indeed this approach eliminates the disparity in level of education being offered, if any. But its application sounds more relevant to the developing nation in comparison to developed nations. The issue has to be addressed by the members of national education committee for its viability & success.

While it does offer benefit like parity in level of education, but at the same time it needs to be assess if this is in good for entire nation. As different students might have different needs. No two students are of same level or have same interests. The capabilities, area of interest, their need for education might differ from each other. For some students, this curriculum might be challenging whereas, for some it might not be sufficient. Some may have interest in history, others might be willing to study maths or a foreign language.

Not just the subjects, the same content might pose a challenge to limit the imagination. As was in the case of the famous scientist Albert Einstein. He found school boring, as what he wanted to know he could not get answers by the teachers. Teachers were focused more on doing well in exam rather than learning. Another example which can be referred here is from the Roman history. The professors used poetry to teach their students. No fixed curriculum was followed by them. They picked a line or a prose and referred it to explain the concept science/history/philosophy. If we look at these examples then this very idea appears as hindrance in learning.

It is a nation's duty to decide what offers a better education and future to their most important asset. How they want to shape them. It depends of the economy, demographics of the nation. However, the best judge is the nation itself. Approach has different consequences in different aspects.

Please review my essay and share your feedback.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Nov 27, 2017   #2
Shweta, are you writing a direct question IELTS test essay? Or is this for a TOEFL essay? You did not provide the type of test you are taking and the full original prompt that you are responding to so that your essay can be properly assessed. What sort of discussion are you supposed to represent in the essay? I don't really see a proper thesis statement presented in the first paragraph. Rather, there is a direct discussion of the topic, without a proper representation of the prompt requirement. The overall discussion in the body of paragraphs can be considered informative. However, I am not sure if this is the proper discussion that you should have provided because of the lack of prompt information. Your paragraph about Albert Einstein is not fully developed as an explanation because you only provided it as a superficial example without reason. The same goes for the Roman history sample. If you do not fully develop your discussions, you will not get a good score. The rule is that you should only present one example, one reason, and a few supporting statements totaling 5 sentences per paragraph. Without considering the prompt requirements though, you have a good and strong essay here. It just needs to be better focused in terms of discussion and prompt presentation in order to heighten your scoring potential.
OP sy9891 1 / 1  
Nov 28, 2017   #3
Hi @Holt: Thank you for your response. I will take care of the point you have mentioned. This essay was written for GRE.
Essay Prompt: Nation should require all of its students to study same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
jrd519 4 / 6  
Nov 29, 2017   #4
Hello, I think your response is adequate, but i believe you should change somethings to make the essay fall into place better.
For example:
being offered, if any.

But its application sounds more relevant to the developing nation in comparison to developed nations. The issue has to be addressed by the members of national education committee for its viability & success.

This application is more relevant to the developing nation in comparison to developed nations, calling forth a need to address this dilemma by members of the national education committee in hopes of viability.

While it does offer benefit(s) like ... education, at the same time


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