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IETLS; Do you agree that it's worth spending money on space exploration?


Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Apr 20, 2013   #1
Question:
With all the troubles in the world today, money spend on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


more funds for advanced space technologies



Though the dynamics of the world changing so rapidly in all aspects, it is very sad that people even now living below the poverty line. This has lead to a heated debate among various communities of the world, to justify the money spent on these advanced space technologies are worth investing or not.

Unfortunately, in some parts of the world people are still struggling to acquire the necessary commodities like food and water. Especially people of Africa were the worst hit by this. If you see the prime cause for these troubles it could be low literacy levels, challenging geographic conditions or an ongoing war which lasted for decades. These factors immensely affects the given country's economy.

On the other hand, if we observe the space exploration from its starting age, the usage of satellites are well known to humans. As the world population and curiosity of the human are growing continuously, scientists are exploring other planets and try to find out the possible living conditions on them. This could even unfold potential threats to the mankind in future.

The advancement in technology is inevitable and more natural. If we can't accept this then the journey of the human from Stone Age to the present day should be scrapped. In my opinion, all this transformation happened because of exploring various technologies and strategies which has raised the living standards.Furthermore, the money spent on these programs are necessary to make our earth a better living place.

homsai 11 / 24 5  
Apr 20, 2013   #2
Unfortunately, in some parts of the world ...

I don't think this paragraph is related to the topic.
You just list the reasons for some countries being poor.
But there is no any point to demonstrate this situation caused by spending resources to space exploration.
If I were you, I would say the drawback of exploration. For example, it waste too much money, so we should stop it and invest resources to those subject that are really need to be invested.
OP Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Apr 20, 2013   #3
Yes himsai,
I've written this on the paper and copied it on to this forum, this way I'm practicing for the exam.While writing I couldn't get more ideas with in the time that's why I've asked for help!!

I see your point here. It's partially discussed and should have the last sentence, no two ways about it.

Unfortunately, in some parts of the world people are still struggling to acquire the necessary commodities like food and water. Especially people of Africa were the worst hit by this. If you see the prime cause for these troubles it could be low literacy levels, challenging geographic conditions or an ongoing war which lasted for decades. These factors immensely affects the given country's economy.In such countries people think it would be more sensible to spend the funds in these essential sectors rather than space exploration.
OP Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Apr 20, 2013   #4
Yes himsai ,

Yes homsai,
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 21, 2013   #5
Hi Redtape,
First, I have a request for you. Please post your IELTS essays under "writing feedback" category and also provide us with a more meaningful topic (what's you've got to type in "subject" field)

This would help you get more comments too :)

, it is very sad that many people even ...

... you need to make that qualification because not everybody is under poverty line.

This has lead led to ... various communitiessections of the world, ... advanced space technologiesstudies are worth investing or not.

.... It is better if you include something to say that money should be spent on more important activities that help raise living standards of humanity.
OP Redtape 4 / 31 11  
Apr 21, 2013   #6
Please post your IELTS essays under "writing feedback" category

Will Do.

money should be spent on more important activities that help raise living standards of humanity.

Exactly dumi, I should have mentioned few areas that needs improvement. Thank you for your time


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