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The impact of climate change and sustainability



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Apr 12, 2023   #1

The impact of climate change and sustainability



When we have a flight in space, we look back at the Earth, we see a block where everything is rapidly changing and facing numerous problems such as conflict, war, climate change, global warming, weather disaster, and so on arousing alarm human beings. The environment is the most urgent problem concerned by scientists, governments, international organizations, social activists, and people around the world. In particular, the effects of climate change are a major challenge and sustainability could be the best solution.

The impact of climate is tremendously severe. First, climate change led to suddenly unusual and unforecast weather causing loss of life and property. For example, a few months ago, an earthquake happened in Turkey and Syria leading to a thousand people dead and destroying a large scale including buildings, and infrastructure. Second, climate change affected major agriculture such as reducing crop yields, the nutritional quality of major cereals, and lowering livestock productivity. In addition, climate change led to longer-term stresses like shortened seasons and erratic weather patterns. Climate change happened by the rising of global temperature from significant greenhouse gas emissions of developed countries, but it affected directly developing countries, especially the Southeast Asia region, South America, Africa, and vulnerable countries. It changed multiple facets of life people suffered from weather disasters, and scarcity of natural resources, and faced the challenges of food security and accommodation.

The unpredictable changes in climate perhaps would be addressed by sustainability. First, that is sustainable development and economic growth which do not trade the environment for economic development goals by implementing a circular economy, using clean energy, set the goals to achieve net zero. For example, Norway is an initiative country about zero-emissions cars, Netherlands recycled plastic to build roads. Second, sustainability is correctly implemented by possessing the right perceptions about the environment. Hence, education plays a vital role in laying the foundation of background knowledge for people, especially young people. On the other hand, sustainability is the solution for protecting natural resources and biodiversity by maximizing input resources and minimizing the amount of waste released into the environment.

In conclusion, sustainability is not the only solution for climate change but sustainability is the most potent way to address weather disasters. For a better future, for the next generation, climate change needs to have specific actions to mitigate and no one is left behind.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Apr 13, 2023   #2
The introduction and thesis paragraph, also known as paragraph one, is so grammatically problematic that you, as the writer, did not successfully present a coherent idea and explanation leading into a properly developed thesis statement. While the paragraph was truly trying to open the discussion with a dramatic impact, the lack of proper English word usage, relevant punctuation marks, and poor sentence structure prevented the dramatic effect from taking hold on the reader.

The impact of climateis tremendously severe.

This is a clear example of why your work confuses the reader. You are poor when it comes to using English words based on definition and differentiation. A reference to "climate" cannot be used interchangeably with "climate change" as these refer to 2 differenct weather scenarios on the planet.

Overall, the essay needs the help of a professional editor to make the opinion paper sound more academic and to help the idea presentation develop in a manner that would show a proper knowledge of English grammar and word usage.


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