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The important lesson is life. The best teachers for the life are parents.


May 7, 2010   #1
Parents are best teacher. This is an old saying. Some people agree with this idea, some do not agree. There is idea exist. The important lesson is life. The best teachers for the life are parents.

The most important subject is life. The best teachers for that subject are parents. Parents prepare their children to the life. Children learn from parents how to deal with problem. They get good advices that they use in their future life. For example I can write about my teacher. He always advices me to hear my parent. He says that I can get good advices from my parents. Eventually, I can benefit from that advices in the future. He has done like that. Therefore, he has made good career and succeeded in life.

Generally, people should count their parents as their life teacher. Cause they are more experienced life. They could teach us about life from their own practice. This information could be very useful. Cause, this information has been proven. People learn from their mistakes in their life not to make that mistake again. Therefore, children should learn from their parents to make fewer mistakes.

To my point I agree with this idea that, parents are the best teacher. They teach the most important subject. This subject is very hard and changeable

Hi,

This is not at all attarctive paragraph.
Here are few suggestion

Try not to repeat one sentence again and again,
Try to connect two sentences.
More thoughts are required
Please rewite it keeping all this in mind.
I will look forward to see you paragraph.

There is an old saying that parents are best teacher.

There is idea exist. The important lesson is life.

The most important subject is life.repetition The best teachers for that subject are parents.

He always advices me to hear listen my parent.
May 16, 2010   #3
Parents are the best teacher (you could say that The parents are the best educator for their children ever) . This is an old saying (say). Some people agree with this idea, some do not agree (you have to change your sentences to be more complicated) like there has been some debate ...

There is idea exist ( it's redundant).

The best teachers for the life are parents (unnecessarily sentence).

The best teachers for that subject are parents ( repetitive say! ).

Children learn from parents how to deal with problem (abundant sentence). They could get applicable advices thatmight be advantegous for their following future.

He always advices me to hear my parent (it's preferable to utilize passive voice or past participle).

Eventually, I can get benefit from that advices (try to use variety of suitable verbs and nouns like recommendations in stead of advices, be away from repitition) in the future. He has done like that (redundant words). Therefore, he has made (get, achieve, attain try to use different and suitable expressions) good career and succeeded in life (successful or prosperous life).

Generally, people should count(consider) their parents as their life's teacher.Because they had gotmore experienced life.
May 16, 2010   #4
Generally, people should count( consider) their parents as their life's teacher.Because they had got more experienced life. They could teach us about life from their own practice. This information could be very useful. Cause, this information has been proven. People learn from their mistakes in their life not to make that mistake again. Therefore, children should learn from their parents to make fewer mistakes.

Because we learn from our parents experienced life, they could teach us about life from their own practice. This proven information has been very useful, results in learning not to make the same mistakes as they did.


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