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What is more important? STUDIES or LUCK?


AidanaMyrzakhan 2 / 1  
Apr 23, 2013   #1
It is really controversial question because both views are right and they often depend on certain situations. Success can closely relate to knowledge and at the same time relate to luck and other factors. In my personal view and experience, it is closely related to study and knowledge.

Some people believe that there are no relation between study and success because success is often dependent on luck, merits such as confidence, сharm, sociability and specific talents. Nowadays we meet a lot of famous and successful people, who reach their aims without studying. Mostly these people are artists, art people or sportsmen. Thereby, we can't deny that this kind of success would not be possible in politics, economics, science or other frames of references. To reach success in business or scientific research, academic and high qualified knowledge is really crucial. In other words, luck plays no role there. I tend to believe that, economical and scientific development plays more important role on human well- being in future rather than show business and other stuff. I often participate in different Olympiads because I know that my knowledge can help me to pass to university and reach my aims. Because of this, I study hard and try to take all important knowledge for me . Therefore, I personally believe that, study is important for success.

To recapitulate, I believe that knowledge is the greatest power, which can open a new secret doors for humanity. Consequently, study is the greatest way to reach success.

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dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 24, 2013   #2
I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. If so, you need to pay attention to your essay structure. If you are preparing for such writing tasks, they should not sound like straight answers to the prompt. Instead your response need to be presented in the style of an essay, stating your opinion and reasoning the opinion with specific examples.
ningo 22 / 53 9  
Apr 24, 2013   #3
Your writing is quite good and the idea is clear. However, to me, some ideas are not persuasive at all. For example, luck can also exist in the exam. Despite of hard-working, we unable to get high mark for some reasons such as illness, writing wrong test code,...
sanaqvi 6 / 12  
Apr 24, 2013   #4
AidanaMyrzakhan
You should take a very clear point of view that will help to write convincingly. For instance,

There are instances in history where some people were able to succeed without studies. However, this factor does not diminish the significance of education in practical life. Therefore, it is argued that education is indeed more vital for success. This will be proven by analysing how studies open the doors for success and significance of education in today's digital age.


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