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The increasing damage of pollution caused by aero transport emerges an opinion to reduce air travel



lanazaldo 7 / 10  
Oct 31, 2016   #1
IELTS task 2 : Restricting air travel is the only way to prevent air pollution. Agree or disagree.

The increasing damage of pollution caused by aero transport emerges an opinion to restrict air travel as the best means to preserve the atmosphere. In my standpoint, I personally disagree towards the notion since this transportation mode is the most effective means for people to span countries all over the world and the prevention of air pollution can be maintained by other several methods.

Needless to say, the airplane exhaust contributes to the level of pollution that clearly deteriorates the atmosphere and sparks the possibility of acid rain which is tremendously devastating for all of living organisms. According to the research conducted by The Green Peace, organisation concerning nature lives, resulted in which 40% of air contamination is produced by airplane as the highest pollutant rate after large ship's figure. The restriction of air travel, therefore, is imperative to restrain the higher amount of natural destruction pertaining to the airplanes' fumes.

However, it will be totally difficult to carry out the restriction with an array of upsides air travel has. The recent situation appears that the most efficient mode for long distance travel is obviously airplane. When the restriction is applied, it generates a bulk of problems for society to commute. Subsequently, the increasing amount of air pollution can be overcome by other means that tend to be more useful without giving up the benefit of air travel. The technological development of airplane can be improved to sustain the total pollution produced as well as the realisation of green technology should be put into the real practice for enriching the aerospace machine.

In conclusion, although to restrict air travel is one of predominant techniques in order that air pollution can be reduced, the more advantageous methods should be considered and employed to acquire virtual merits.

misskitty22 2 / 2  
Oct 31, 2016   #2
Hi Mr. lanazaldo

Your writing has a wide range of vocabularies and very clear explanation.
The lexical resources for example collocation are written nicely and in a good order.
The last, many sentences are also written in the perfect pattern without any over complicated sentence.
justivy03 - / 2265  
Oct 31, 2016   #3
Hi Rizaldo, as I read along, I must say that you have written a well managed essay. First of all, there is just the right number of paragraph, not too long and not too short, enough to answer the prompt and make your idea known to your readers. Next, you have a logical order, from the introduction, the body of the essay and the conclusion, you have followed the standard flow of essay writing and the simplicity of your words will also help in the comprehension of your readers.

However, I have a few suggestions towards the last paragraph of the essay;

- In conclusion, although to restricting air travel
- is one of the predominant techniques in order to reducethat air pollution can be reduced , thea more advantageous methods should be (...) to acquire virtuala more effective merits .

There you have it Rizaldo, I hope the above remarks help in the revision of the last paragraph.


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