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An increasing tendency to stay alone rather than be engaged in any relationship



Linh_Nguyen 2 / 4  
May 6, 2021   #1

many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past



In this modern world, there has been an increasing tendency for citizens in a number of countries to stay alone rather than engage themselves in any relationship. From my own perspective, this trend can lead to positive enhancement for both society in general and each individual in particular.

The very initial benefit of this choice is that each person is able to spend more time on developing themselves, leading to more opportunities for successful career. Take a twenty-four-year-old youngster as an example. Instead of spending time on relationship, he may find himself more interested in the work he is doing, which ignites his passion for his job and encourages him to learn as well as to devote himself seriously. This then sharpens his potentials and broadens his knowledge in his desired field. There is no reason for a dedicated and eager individual not to acquire achievement and self-improvement after such hard work. Each excellent person will in turn contribute to a more advanced society.

In addition, people are living in a world where they make decisions independently; therefore, staying alone is more like a choice of life rather than just a marital status. Being alone enables them to have more time for themselves and find their truly inner peace. This also allows a better connection between one's body and soul, leading to a status of healthier mental strength of each individual. Without mental illnesses, it is easier for everyone to perceive their innate value and ability, resulting in higher quality of the labor force for the society.

In conclusion, people are beneficial from a life a being alone as this way of life make positive contributions to self-enhancement and a more developing economy.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
May 7, 2021   #2
The essay was on track for the most part. oThe restatement, the discussion were all good and remained related tothe prompt, Discussion points had convincing examples and are based on sound logic and common sense. However, an example based upon your own experience rather thana generic person would have helped the coherenceand cohesiveness score a lot more as it would have helped show and advanced English comprehension skill on your part. Regardless, that does not remove the strength and validity of your discussion. an expanded summary conclusion would have also helped advance you C&C score as you would have shown a better summary skill based on pertinent data presentation. still, you did good work here. I am sure it would have gotten a high scoring consideration.
OP Linh_Nguyen 2 / 4  
May 9, 2021   #3
Thank you so much for your time and your comments. I will pay more attention to the conclusion


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