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TOEFL; Integrated writing task - Team Work is the best way to handle a new project


sinafrm1365 1 / 1  
Jun 17, 2013   #1
The article states that having a team member is the best way to attack a new project in many firms provides three reasons of support. However, the professor refutes each of the author's reasons by giving an example of what happened as a result of a team work in a company.

First, the reading claims that having a wider range of knowledge, expertise, and skills in a team work will lead to better results. Nevertheless, the professor refutes this point by saying that these resources may not be effectively used. According to a recent group work in the company, it was illustrated that one or two members dominated other members by insisting on an idea or refusing that and in both situations the rest of the team should follow them even if they have more innovative and useful ideas.

Second, the article posits that quick and cohesive results will be achieved due to active interaction between team members. However, the professor says that it is not going to happen all the time and of course in all projects. As it shown by the company, some disagreements may be occurred between the members trying to come up with an unit decision and consequently taking too long time for them reaching a compromise.

Third, the reading says that it could be a valuable opportunity for all the team members to shine better if the project succeeded, and their individual's contribution would consider significantly. On the other hand, the professor opposes this point by explaining that some of the team members may not take responsibilities for their contributions. According to the company's recent team work, some members got a "free ride", and didn't work hard, properly, and efficiently. Furthermore, those members who had worked hard on the project didn't receive more acclaim or didn't shine better.
dragosp 2 / 2  
Jun 17, 2013   #2
Well, I think that you should focus more on the essay structure
shadman19922 21 / 74 10  
Jun 17, 2013   #3
"The article states that having a team member is the best way to attack a new project in many firms provides three reasons of support" - This sentence is quite confusing and grammatically incorrect. A better way to write it would be "The article states that the having a team member is the best way to attack new projects in many firms, and provides three points to support this assertion."

"it was illustrated that one or two members dominated other members by insisting on an idea or refusing that and (Use ,and . Or better, just divide up the two sentences, makes it look nicer and cleaner) in both situations the rest of the team should follow them even if they have more innovative and useful ideas."

"As it (was ) shown by the company"

"some disagreements may be occurred (may occur ), a single clause never has two verbs)between the members trying to come up with an unit decision and consequently taking too long time for them reaching a compromise(and consequently waste a lot of time in making a compromise )"

"and their individual's contribution would consider (increase/some other synonym)significantly"

Since you didn't provide the topic, I can't comment on your analysis of the given argument. However, this response is rife with grammatical errors, even if your response may be fully correct logically, grammar alone can bring the score of this response down to a 3.

I think that you're pretty new to this. My advice is that you don't use long sentences in your writing for the next few practice responses. Also, Read a lot: Scientific American, The Economist, The daily newspaper. ANYTHING. Reading a lot will help you with you fix your grammar.
OP sinafrm1365 1 / 1  
Jun 17, 2013   #4
Thank you so much shadman. your comments were so useful for me.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 29, 2013   #5
First, the reading claims that having a wider range of knowledge, expertise, and skills in a team work will lead to better results.

First, the reading passage claims that a team exerts a greater power than that of an individual in terms of knowledge, expertise and skills.

However, the professor says that it is not going to happen all the time and of course in all projects.

However, the professor counter argues that this situation is different according to the type and nature of projects.


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