I have write an opinion/letter to the editor about the issue "knives in school".
This is my plan:
Intro: address the issue, why is it bad?
Paragraph 1: Talk about knives in general, give some stats
Paragraph 2: Talk about knives in school. What is the issue? Few stats. Examples
Paragraph 3: A possible solution - I think that the Australian community are resorting to violence to solve conflicts. So if we have a crackdown on weapons and fix this thinking it may just work
Conclusion.
This is what I have so far:
Hello everyone! Today I will be talking about an issue that is plaguing the Australian community, the issue is knives. The amount of knife attacks in the community has risen dramatically to an astonishing rate. What is more alarming is that a lot of attacks are happening in schools - a place where we are meant to feel safe! I think we should do something to
First paragraph:
To give you an idea how bad this issue is and how much it is rising, we have to look at the stats. According to the latest figures, the rate of robberies fell 17 percent after being adjusted for population. However, the number of robberies in which a knife was used, threatened or displayed rose 9.1 percent up to around 800 and robberies with an axe or tomahawk were up by 260 percent! If these figures don't sound crazy enough, police caught 58 children aged 10 to 14 with knives or bladed weapons, a 45 percent increase, and 287 teens aged 15 to 19. When we have half the knife robberies conducted by teenage kids, it proves that the kid and anyone who has direct responsibility for their actions are all idiots and as a community we should look down upon them! Honestly, these parents have to do something about their kids so they don't become unless people that contribute nothing to society. No one cares if your child thinks carrying a knife will protect him, the truth is that YOU know it is wrong and it is YOUR (not anyone else's) responsibility to deal with him/her correctly. The amount of stories I hear about knife attacks on the news and in the papers is just incredible, it is a disgrace that you need to factor in being assaulted or killed if you plan a night out in the city!
Solution para:
I think this issue is important and should be addressed quickly, I have created a few solutions that I think will help counter this dreadful issue. It might be simplistic but surely the solution to the increasing amount of knife attacks is to have a massive crackdown on anyone suspected of carrying such weapons and put them in jail! This is probably the best method in cracking down on knife holders. Seriously, if you are roaming around the city at night wielding a knife, it is not because you are going to your grandmother's house to help her chop the veges, it is because you want to be violent, you want to kill! We need ZERO TOLERANCE laws on people who are carrying these weapons, don't give them stupid fines, PUT THEM IN JAIL, let them learn so they are not just another piece of garbage that no one likes.
Any feedback? It is not complete yet but I want to see if I'm headed in the right direction first.
Thanks in advance!
This is my plan:
Intro: address the issue, why is it bad?
Paragraph 1: Talk about knives in general, give some stats
Paragraph 2: Talk about knives in school. What is the issue? Few stats. Examples
Paragraph 3: A possible solution - I think that the Australian community are resorting to violence to solve conflicts. So if we have a crackdown on weapons and fix this thinking it may just work
Conclusion.
This is what I have so far:
Hello everyone! Today I will be talking about an issue that is plaguing the Australian community, the issue is knives. The amount of knife attacks in the community has risen dramatically to an astonishing rate. What is more alarming is that a lot of attacks are happening in schools - a place where we are meant to feel safe! I think we should do something to
First paragraph:
To give you an idea how bad this issue is and how much it is rising, we have to look at the stats. According to the latest figures, the rate of robberies fell 17 percent after being adjusted for population. However, the number of robberies in which a knife was used, threatened or displayed rose 9.1 percent up to around 800 and robberies with an axe or tomahawk were up by 260 percent! If these figures don't sound crazy enough, police caught 58 children aged 10 to 14 with knives or bladed weapons, a 45 percent increase, and 287 teens aged 15 to 19. When we have half the knife robberies conducted by teenage kids, it proves that the kid and anyone who has direct responsibility for their actions are all idiots and as a community we should look down upon them! Honestly, these parents have to do something about their kids so they don't become unless people that contribute nothing to society. No one cares if your child thinks carrying a knife will protect him, the truth is that YOU know it is wrong and it is YOUR (not anyone else's) responsibility to deal with him/her correctly. The amount of stories I hear about knife attacks on the news and in the papers is just incredible, it is a disgrace that you need to factor in being assaulted or killed if you plan a night out in the city!
Solution para:
I think this issue is important and should be addressed quickly, I have created a few solutions that I think will help counter this dreadful issue. It might be simplistic but surely the solution to the increasing amount of knife attacks is to have a massive crackdown on anyone suspected of carrying such weapons and put them in jail! This is probably the best method in cracking down on knife holders. Seriously, if you are roaming around the city at night wielding a knife, it is not because you are going to your grandmother's house to help her chop the veges, it is because you want to be violent, you want to kill! We need ZERO TOLERANCE laws on people who are carrying these weapons, don't give them stupid fines, PUT THEM IN JAIL, let them learn so they are not just another piece of garbage that no one likes.
Any feedback? It is not complete yet but I want to see if I'm headed in the right direction first.
Thanks in advance!