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Jean Paul Sartre thought is eligble in 21 st



Askarie26 2 / 4  
Nov 11, 2016   #1
This papers deal with the correlation between Jean Paul Sartre's (JPL) thought and the 21st century which is well-known as one dimensional society, lack of critical thought.

The Hollywood industry of movie which has been influencing Indonesians for many years is with his movies that show the wealthy actor who has a luxury life, BMW, sophisticated device, "Prada" bag, etc. Sometimes, people are not aware of its impact. It is a new strategy of capitalist system which be applied from the media.

Capitalist system which gradually emerges into the markets with a new image gives insurances, bonuses, scholarships in order to attract the society to be a consumptive. This becomes a huge problem in the decades which are faced by. The Philosophers, however, do not keep silence of it.

JPL was a French Philosopher (1905--1980). He was one of the key of figure in philosophy of existentialism and one of the leading figures in 20th-century French Philosophy. He said "Other is hell", and he was also advocating that existence precedes essence. These propagandas are greatly handy to use in nowadays. When the others philosophers stag to make a new paradigm of people in public sphere.

Dioba 68 / 97  
Nov 11, 2016   #2
HI, let me give some advice, perhaps useful for you.
1.This papers ----> you should paraphrase this sentence to introduce your essay. reader cannot follow your essay if you start with the statement.
2.onea dimensional society, lack of critical thought. (better if you use article, not number)
3.you have to put conjunction to make your essay's flow smoothly. ( for instance: moreover, furthermore, in one hand, etc)
4.be careful about your punctuation ( This becomes a huge problem in the decades which are faced by. ( you should not put dot in here) The Philosophers, however, do not keep silence of it. )
OP Askarie26 2 / 4  
Nov 11, 2016   #3
@Dioba
Thanks a lot for your advice.
ryan31 65 / 89  
Nov 11, 2016   #4
hello hasan
nice to read your essay
let me give you some advice
hope it works

... Indonesians for many years is with his movies (...) a luxury life such as BMW, sophisticated ...

... not aware of itsthis impact. It is a new strategy of the capitalist system which beis applied from the media.

Capitalist system which has gradually emerges...
... huge problem in thethis decades which are faced by society .

The Philosophers, however, do not keep silence of it.
However, The Philosophers does not keep it silence.

... the key of figures in philosophy of ...

These propagandas are greatly handy ...

When the others philosophers stag ...
Meanwhile, the others philosophers stag to make a new paradigm of people in the public sphere.

thanks
keep writing


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