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A JOB YOU LOVE or A JOB THAT PAYS YOU WELL?


canizarro 2 / 2  
Aug 25, 2010   #1
Recently, the issue of being happy is more important than having a high salary from it has been brought into public focus .Although a high salary could make me live well, we should not regard work just as a bread-winning process, we should take a wider perspective on work

when you are happy with your work, you will have enough patient and enthusiasm to do it , then you may have some discoveries , this new discoveries can contribute to your inspiration, with these inspiration you will be more creative, and you will have a good understand of yourself , knowing what kind of abilities you have , what kind of things you can deal with better , and which subjects you are interested in . It's help to build a suitable career in the future. High salary just give you a movement satisfaction , have nothing with your future.

Enjoying what you do is important. You will put your heart in what you enjoy, people can make improvement easily when they do what they are interested in. when you realize your improvement , you will feel encourage and confident, the result maybe get a great achievement. It helps to find your meaning in life and a way to enhance your self-worth, also, you will become a useful people to make a difference in the world.

A work let you feel happy , not only because it attracts you ,but also conclude these facts such as with a right group people, comfortable working conditions , these insects are as important as your work, it can save time to deal with lots of unnecessary pressure, no matter how much money you cannot buy it

Sunny1 1 / 3  
Aug 27, 2010   #2
firstly,when a person feels happy with his work..

this sentence is very long, try put some full stops.
for example:
F irstly,when a person feels happy with his work, he will have enough patient and enthusiasm to do it .He may have some discoveries that could contribute to his inspiration and hence be more creative. All these characteristics listed about would lead him to understand himself better; knowing what kind of abilities he has, what kind of things he can deal with better, and which subjects he is interested in
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 28, 2010   #3
Recently, the issue of being happy is more important than having a high salary from it has been brought into public focus .

I don't think it is correct to say it recently has come into public focus. It is a timeless question.

You can start like this:
The issue of being happy involves timeless questions. For example, is it necessary to have a high salary or a good reputation?

This sentence needs a conjunction, because you say 2 things:
You will put your heart in what you enjoy, and people can make improvement easily when they do what they are interested in.--- I added the conjunction "and"

Make the corrections suggested by Tanya and Sony. That is a good way to practice! Thanks for participating!! I hope you can improve your English skill by participating here.


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