Unanswered [4] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 4


Leadership experience - leader is one who learns from their success and failure



kbros9193 3 / 6  
Jan 12, 2009   #1
Discuss a leadership experience you have had in any area of your life - school, work, athletics, family, church, community, etc. How and why did you become a leader in this area? How did this experience influence your goals?

A good leader is one who learns from their success and failure. My experience as team captain of my basketball team has taught me many valuable lessons. In my career as an athlete I have participated on teams that lost, as well as teams that were successful. As a leader on these teams I have learned very many valuable lessons that have helped me develop into a strong individual.

Playing on losing teams is never fun. We all strive to be successful in all that we do. But our failures serve as a platforms for as to vault to success. Playing on a losing team has taught me the values of perseverance, determination and hard work. When the score of a basketball game is lopsided, the easiest thing to do is give up. But as a captain on my basketball team, I learned that giving up is declaring your own premature defeat. Persevering through hard losses gave my team the determination to work harder in practice and in our games. Our hard work translated into more wins.

Although success is sweet, you can not be content with what you have achieve. You must strive to exceed your own achievement. This is an important lesson that I have learned through my experience as captain of my basketball team. When my team won games, we were happy with our success. But we were never content, our desire to win only grew stronger with every win. My basketball team was able to make it to the City of Raleigh championship game, because we never put a celling on our success.

The lessons that I have taken away from my experience as a captain on my basketball will be instrumental in my success both at a collegiate level as well as in my career. Perseverance, determination and hard work are the tools that I need to rise from my failures. And in my success, striving to surpass my own excellence will ensure that I will never be content with my achievement. I will only continue to work on improving on what I have already accomplished.

yasin391 6 / 22  
Jan 12, 2009   #2
Great essay, you answered the question but there are some errors. Overall it is great.

A good leader is one who learns from their success and failure. My experience as team captain of my basketball team has taught me many valuable lessons. In my career as an athlete I have participated on teams that lost, as well as teams that were successful. As a leader on these teams I have learned very many valuable lessons that have helped me develop into a strong individual.

Playing on the losing team is never fun. We all strive to be successful in all that we do. But our failures serve as a platforms for us to vault to success. Playing on a losing team have taught me the values of perseverance, determination and hard work. When the score of a basketball game is lopsided, the easiest thing to do is give up. But as the captain of my basketball team, I learned that giving up is declaring your own premature defeat. Persevering through hard losses gave my team the determination to work harder in practice and in our games. Our hard work translated into more wins.

Although success is sweet, you can not be content with what you have achieve. You must strive to exceed your own achievement. This is an important lesson that I have learned through my experience as captain of my basketball team. When my team won games, we were happy with our success. But we were never content, our desire to win only grew stronger with every win. My basketball team was able to make it to the City of Raleigh championship game, because we never put a ceiling on our success.

The lessons that I have taken away from my experience as a captain on my basketball will be instrumental in my success both at a collegiate level as well as in my career. Perseverance, determination and hard work are the tools that I need to rise from my failures. And in my success, striving to surpass my own excellence will ensure that I will never be content with my achievement. I will only continue to work on improving on what I have already accomplished.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 13, 2009   #3
Good advice here! I'm sorry I did not get here in time! I would switch the paragraphs around and start with this short intro:

The lessons that I have taken away from my experience as a captain on my basketball will be instrumental in my success both at a collegiate level as well as in my career. Perseverance, determination and hard work are the tools that I need to rise from my failures. And in my success, striving to surpass my own excellence will ensure that I will never be content with my achievement. I will only continue to work on improving on what I have already accomplished.
vj_justin 3 / 4  
Jan 14, 2009   #4
You also have to answer the qn "How and why did you become a leader in this area?".
Also you can add specific examples of how you were able to support and motivate your team.
And the essay in total looking nice and answers the qn. The conclusion is very good


Home / Writing Feedback / Leadership experience - leader is one who learns from their success and failure
Do You Need
Academic Writing
or Editing Help?
Need professional help with your assignments? Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳