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IELTS Task 1 - Line Chart (The USA and China birth rate)


Leo2109 1 / -  
Apr 24, 2020   #1

Changes in the birth rates 1920-2000



The chart illustrates the birth rates shifts between 2 developed countries namely China and the USA from 1920 to 2000.
The overarching trend is that both nations experienced a gradual decrease over the course of 20 years, in which there was a less substantial change in weight occur in the USA.

Taking a closer look at the graph, one can see that American birth percentage fluctuated around 12% in the first 20 years before hitting the low at less than 5% in 1945. Then there was a significant recovery, reaching to 15% in 1945, followed by a consistent decline to over 5% in 2000. In the case of China, its birth rate varied more dramatically than that of the USA over the same period. After dropping to 5% and remained stable from 1940 to 1945, it recovered and reached the highest points of 20% in 1950. Following that, the China's birth rate halved in 1955 and the downward pattern carried on to roughly 2% in the next 45 years.

Your comments and feedbacks are highly appreciated. Thank you!




Athiyya17 2 / 6  
Apr 25, 2020   #2
I think it's better for you to breakdown each year from 1920 to 1950 since the chart is shows significant difference that you can explore more. You can generalize the period of time e.g the last 20 years, when the chart starts to seem stable. I suggest you to take out the opinion words such as "recovery". That's all from me, let's see what the contributor has to say. Good luck!


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