[ IELTS ] The line graph illustrates the number of cars that were owned by households in Britain

CAR OWNERSHIP IN BRITAIN

The line graph illustrates the number of cars that were owned by households in Britain between 1971 to 2007.

Overall, it is clear that car ownership increased during the period shown, while the number of households without a car fell dramatically.

In 1971, 49% of Britain households did not have a regular use of a car, and the percentage of households with a car was about 45%. It was uncommon for families having more three cars and two cars, by around 2% and 8% of households respectively.

The proportion of households that used two cars rose significantly to around 26% in 2007, while the statistic for families without a car experienced
a dramatic decline to 25% in 2003 before reaching the dip at 23% in 2006 ,and then growing again to 25% in 2007. In contrast, The percentage of households with a car remained stable from 1971 to 2007, and the proportion of households with more three cars increased slightly from 2% in 1971 to 8% in 2007.

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