We lived in a world with hundreds of countries with different languages. Some of these can disappear

Question:
Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

My answer:
We lived in a world with hundreds of countries with different languages. Some of these languages, however, are in danger of disappearing. Some people have an opinion that it does not make any difficulties in their lives, it means the fewer languages exist, the easier life will be. I pretty agree with this as it opens up avenues for better communication and development.

Language is one of the fundamental principles of every country, and serve a vital function in society, literature, education and other parts. Besides, it is the embodiment of culture, traditions and history of a country. With losing a language, all mentioned features will be at risk of extinction, however, these kinds of languages are used in some small countries or even in rural areas that may seem not very indispensable to consider.

As recent changes in technology have had a massive impact on the way we live, whereby people find new ways to communicate with each other, like the Internet. Existing fewer languages to know positively correlated with better communication. As a result, some languages such as English or French are used and spoken in many countries. Also, establishing one language throughout a country gives some opportunity to governments to develop and extend tourism, or new facilities for education instead of invest in retaining an ineffectual language.

In conclusion, although losing a language has some disadvantages, I believe extending fewer languages catalyzes better life for everyone.

I didn't focus on grammar issues. Here are some suggestions to help you improve:

1st paragraph: In the opening sentence, you may want to change part of this sentence to:where many languages are spoken in different countries. Revise the third sentence to make it more clear to the reader. You want the reader to understand that change is good for some people because they feel that life will be easier if fewer languages existed in the world. That fewer languages will exist and life will be easier Delete this sentence because it is repeating that life will be easier. I'm unsure what is trying to be expressed by stating there will be better communication and development.

Do you feel that when there are fewer languages spoken, better communication exists between people?

2nd paragraph:This last sentence needs to be simply stated. There is too much information that is trying to be expressed. I think you are trying to say, when languages die out; it takes a toll on society. However, this whole paragraph is in support of you feeling that other languages should exist.

3rd paragraph: Here is what I think you were trying to express in the last paragraph: The internet has facilitated better communication between people. Therefore, when people speak a widely spoken language, they are able to communicate better across many mediums.

If your opinion agrees with the question, just focus on agreeing rather than disagreeing. I hope this helps!