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Making an Impact- Parsons Artist statement 2014



MckenzieHarris 2 / 3  
Sep 22, 2014   #1
Prompt:
ARTIST STATEMENT
What do you make, how do you make it, and why do you make? Ultimately, where do you visualize your creative abilities and academic study to take you after your education here at Parsons?

Making an Impact
Throughout my life I have never had a diary, just sketchbooks. Art has always been my way of expressing emotions in a way that I cannot through spoken or written words. Art is supposed to create emotion, whether its fascination, sorrow, disgust, etc. thats up to the artist. Its the same when it comes to fashion. When you get ready you put on something to show people something about yourself, you make a statement. I love designing fashion because it allows me to create wearable art pieces that represent whoever is wearing them and present an image to show to the world. Fashion makes everywhere become an art gallery, showing what each separate person wants to project among the world.

Since I was young I have had the biggest fear of leaving this world before I have time to make my mark. It has been a fear that has followed me my whole life and manifested in everything I do. The way to change the world is to be innovative. I believe if you live within limits then you will never be able to create something truly inspirational. Its important to use non traditional materials and think of crazy new things to try. Whenever I get the chance to try something new I take it, perhaps im crazy but thats better than being boring.

During my second summer at the Parsons Summer Intensive Studies we had a guest lecture from a recent parsons alumni. His name was Thi Wan and he talked about how for his senior project he spent months creating a new biodegradable fabric that would eventually fade away without harming the environment. This was completely eye opening because I had never thought of that because most of the time fashion is made out of fabric. This expanded the way I think and taught me to experiment with the way to create things.

I create art to show my emotions and inner feeling that cannot be spoken or written. Fashion is the ultimate form of self expression. When you create a piece it become transformed by whoever is wearing it. It means different things to different people which is what I absolutly love. Fashion allows me manipulate the human body. People have always told me that fashion cannot change the world and if you want to be truly successful become a lawyer or a doctor. Not many people can appreciate fashion because for many people fashion doesn't matter, but It allows me to project my feelings and innermost thoughts through designing and making a garment.

I am far from where I want to be but I am also far from where I started. Every single day is an investment for the future. I do at least one thing a day, no matter how small, that will help me to be successful. I have big ambitions and that I will never achieve if I do not work as hard as I possibly can. Studying at Parsons would help me grow immensely. During the past two summers at the summer intensive studies I was taught extremely valuable information, unlike anything i have learned before. Undoubtedly studying at parsons will take a lot of work but I am more than willing to put in the work in order to grow. Throughout my life, I never want to stop learning. Where ever I go I want to be able to have the freedom to express myself and utilize my creative abilities. I believe Parsons The New School For Design is the right choice for me because it allows me to have the freedom and the knowledge to create art that will impact the world.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Sep 22, 2014   #2
Fashion is known as the ultimate statement a person can make about herself or himself. That is why fashion designers are known world wide. They design innovative concepts and put on shows that show their vision of the future of the fashion world. While you touched on some of this aspects in your essay, it feels to me like you spent most of the essay trying to develop answers to the prompt that were never really completed. Maybe because you lost track of the prompts midstream. There is a missing component in your essay as far as I can tell. That is the final part of the prompt that asks you discuss;

where do you visualize your creative abilities and academic study to take you after your education here at Parsons?

It seems that your response to this was;

I am far from where I want to be but I am also far from where I started. Every single day is an investment for the future. I do at least one thing a day, no matter how small, that will help me to be successful. I have big ambitions and that I will never achieve if I do not work as hard as I possibly can. Studying at Parsons would help me grow immensely. During the past two summers at the summer intensive studies I was taught extremely valuable information, unlike anything i have learned before. Undoubtedly studying at parsons will take a lot of work but I am more than willing to put in the work in order to grow. Throughout my life, I never want to stop learning. Where ever I go I want to be able to have the freedom to express myself and utilize my creative abilities. I believe Parsons The New School For Design is the right choice for me because it allows me to have the freedom and the knowledge to create art that will impact the world.

You basically did not answer that part of the prompt. There are no solid plans for where you plan to take yourself after graduation. So you have no idea of what you want to achieve when that time comes. I suggest you rethink this portion of the essay and develop a more solid response. Something along the lines of "After graduating from Parson, I plan to stage a show at New York Fashion week within 2 years before having a bigger and more popular show in 3 more years during Paris Fashion Week..." or something along those lines. That is the type of definite answer that the prompt is looking for. As of now, your answer is quite vague and directionless.
RevtZ_hh 3 / 11  
Sep 22, 2014   #3
I think you are a little out of the right way. I believe also, that your poor understanding is obvious as your plan and the whole arguments barely answer the prompt. I suggest that you re-read the assignement and to re-write a stong on-topic essay. Good Luck.


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