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Mania can be good, warming, and deathly. Nowadays, a novel mania is arising...



WasishaSisha 16 / 18  
Nov 14, 2016   #1
TED: WORLD'S ENGLISH MANIA - JAY WALKER

Mania can be good, warming, and deathly. Their interest could be widely diverse such as there are Beatles mania, Sports mania, Religious Mania. Nowadays, a novel mania is arising, called English mania. This mania also emerged In China, where most of the people acquired English by screaming it. Chinese pupils have been starting to study English since third grade. The reasons why they have to learn English started from the sole word, which is OPPORTUNITY. It means opportunity for better life and a job. Needless to say, people who know English, especially its mania, could pay for school and all kinds of foods in their table. Chinese student must be taken up English 12 hours a day for taking a great test that will determine their entire life. The World has universal language such mathematic and music instead of English. People can conduct global conversations with English to converse global issues: climate change, poverty, and diseases. English reflect a hope for better future. Our future needs general language to solve global problems.

nda18 46 / 60  
Nov 14, 2016   #2
hi, these are my though towards your summary

it would be better if you write opening sentence

... started from the sole word, which is OPPORTUNITY
[ you do not have to write in capital letter if you want to emphasize the word. ]
It means the opportunity for ...

..People can conduct global conversations with English to converse global issues
[ i have a suggestion : By using English, people can conduct global conversation and solve the global issues ...]

good summary, keep writing
thanks and good luck
ichanpants89 16 / 742  
Nov 14, 2016   #3
Hello Shisha! In addition to the above comments, below are my inputs toward your essay; hope you will gain insights from reading my notes!

- Nowadays, a novel mania, known as English mania, is arising, called English mania . (Pay attention to the sentence structure)
- ... acquired English by screaming it .
- ... started from theone(notice where you should use word "the" and "one" in writing) sole word, which isOPPORTUNITY.(if you want to emphasize certain word/s, you can use italic or bold instead).

Also, I love the first sentence of your essay. For me, it is an interesting opening sentence that can attract reader's interest. The lexical choice that you used is also good. On top of that you know how to express the ideas and write a good summary. Keep practicing!


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