The maps show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development

The two maps illustrate the changes in the centre of a small town called islip and its development plan in the future. Overall, several major modifications have been made, primarily to enhance the convenience and more amenities in the planned development.
It is a clear change that a dual carriageway will be built in the planned development that run through from west to east to access easily with infrastructures. Another improvement is the park will be shrinked in the development to make way for more new housing, improving better in amenities that appealing more residents to live here. Moreover, a pedetrians street will be built in place of the shops, and the school in the south of the map will be extended a little than old one. In the planned development, the shops are going to be replaced and offering more space for communl amenities such as bus station, shopping centre, car park, the new housing area will be built as well, from this, creating a street can travel via dual carriageway. Despite these changes, the shops under the main road remain unchanged.

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While the essay is well written and does provide the information necessary for the changes, the presentation is not really well done. The paragraphs needs to be clearly divided instead of compressed in this presentation. The summary overview and body of paragraphs must be clearly separated by a paragraph space. There is also more room for the discussion development since you can write a maximum of 200 words. It would be advisable for you to clearly describe the existing location plan of Islip in one paragraph, then describe the changes in the next one. That way you clearly meet the before and after description requirements for this type of essay. While your presentation is strong in terms of future plan presentation, it is weak in terms of describing the current set up.