The mass media: TV, radio and newspapers, have great influence on people's ideas

Topic: The mass media, including television, radio and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The issue whether the mass media, including television, radio and newspapers affects people's thinking is under discussion. Some people believe that they have a considerable effect on people while others claim that the opposite is true. I am convinced by the former view for following reasons. (the former view means the view of proponents)

Firstly, the mass media is to expand our understanding about environment. There are a huge number of environmental programs on television every week which provides numerous viewers with explanation of what environment is and how important it is. Earth Talk Today program is an example which enables us to expand our knowledge about hot environmental issues by interviewing experts. Without these programs, hardly may citizens comprehend the reasons why we have to protect the air, water and land on the Earth.

Another argument is that television, radio and newspapers intensify our knowledge about social issues and have significant influence on our attitude towards these problems. Every day there are several events broadcasted and analyzed on television and radio. Regardless of what the truth is, our view counts on information the mass media provides. For example, when financial crisis happens, almost only bad news is reported by the mass media while good news is ignored, causing people to be more pessimistic than necessary. Moreover, most of us contend whether a social event is good or not, which depends substantially on what experts analyze in the media. For instance, when the government reduces tariff rates, we might feel it bad. However, after watching economic programs in which economist show this policy brings benefits outweigh drawbacks, we are highly possible to change our mind.

In short, the mass media, including television, radio and newspapers has a big impact on our thought, cultivating our knowledge about the world, life, social issues and orienting our attitude towards them.

The issue whether the mass media, including television, radio and newspapers affects people's thinking is under discussion. Some people believe that they have a considerable effect on people while others claim that the opposite is true. I am convinced by the former view for following reasons.(What is the former view? and state your reasons)

The first reason for my support is that(This sounds like the elementary level way of writing. I prefer you just delete those words, and leave the rest of the sentence as is.)T he mass media is to expand our understanding about environment. There is(I believe "are" before "a" is gramatically incorrect, and it sounds wrong when read) a huge number of environmental programs on television every week which provides numerous viewers with explanation of the environment, and how important it is. Provide an example of a show or program, and talk about it. Without these programs, citizens may hardly comprehend the reasons why we have to protect the air, water and land on the Earth. Besides, not only does the mass media enhance our perception of the world, but it also gives us simple ways to save our home, classifying rubbish, not buying products doing harm to environment, etc.(I don't like this sentence. Very confusing. You might want to add that other movies and shows are also educational to personal lives and experiences . . . somewhere along those lines and explain with examples if you can.)

Another argument is that television, radio and newspapers intensify our knowledge about social issues and have significant influence on our attitude towards these problems. Every day there are several events which are broadcasted and analyzed on television and radio. Most of us contend whether a social event is good or not, which depends substantially on what experts analyze in the media. Moreover, regardless of what the truth is, whether good news outweigh bad news affects considerably our point of view about the situation occurring.(I got lost reading this. I could not comprehend what you were trying to say. Try to make it a little more simple) For example, when financial crisis happens, almost only bad news is reported by the mass media while other good news is ignored, whichcausing people to be more pessimistic than necessary.

In short, the mass media, including television, radio and newspapers,(the comma is not needed) has a big impact on our thoughts , cultivating our knowledge about the world, life, social issues and orienting our attitude towards them.

You need to proofread and be more detailed. Hope it helps.

Thanks Caren Mamaradlo a lot. I really appreciate your help

Even though you feel like you are saying "There are...problems," This sentence actually says, "There are a...number," which is incorrect.

You should just write
There are many...
There is an enormous amount of ...
or
There is a number of ....
That is a strange rule to try to follow.

Moreover, most of us contend debate whether a social event is good or not, and our views depend substantially on what experts analyze in the media.

:-)

Thanks Susan