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We need neighbors who are helpful, kind, understanding and encouragingr



vaishali1980 26 / 76  
Jun 30, 2010   #1
Human likes to leave in society and, share and help to each other. But nowadays everyone is busy in their schedule; some are busy in study, some are in office. No one has a time to get to know much about their neighbor.

It is very important to know about the neighbor and help them when it is necessary. There are many reason for having good neighbors and they should have qualities like helping, understanding, encouraging us.

The first quality that a neighbor should have is helping nature. We don't know our fate. We don't know when we will face difficult situation. Neighbor is a one of who may know about our crises.

I have had many experiences when my neighbors helped me in my critical situation. As an example, when I was in my last year post graduation, I had interview in Mumbai. I wanted some money to go to Mumbai. I asked everyone whom I had helped but no one gave me money. Only few hours left to go to Mumbai, suddenly my neighbor came and gave me 1000 rs without any expectation. I didn't ask him about money.

He helped me himself and I am always thankful for that one. Another example that my father suffered paralysis attach. My mother and younger sister whoever at home. That difficult situation my neighbor helped us to take my father to the hospital.

Neighbors should have quality to understand us. We share our house or property with some neighbors. If we renew our property or taking some facilities like light connection, water connection. It may be disturbing or making noise, as that situation, it is very important that neighbor should be understandable. My daughter is 2 year old and she always runs around the home and makes lots of noise. My neighbor complained about it to the rental office. After some days they left to some other places and new neighbor has come. I was afraid if I would get a complain again about my daughter. Once I had spoken with new neighbor and told about my situation. She is very kind person and said that it is fine, we can't stop kids.

The third important quality is to ability encourage us. Neighbor should have quality to encourage us when we need. For example, We decided to shift from our rental house, to the our own house after my father had a paralysis attach. Before shifting, I did reconstruct of our own house.

My neighbor encouraged me to do all necessary things over there.

As a result, We need neighbors who are helpful, kind, understanding and encouraging us.

yerupaja_25 1 / 2  
Jun 30, 2010   #2
A qualities of a good neighbor is someone you can depend on in terms of guarding your house when you're are not there, help you without expecting any in return
Azeri 10 / 130  
Jun 30, 2010   #3
Human - if you imply to mankind you add "the", but if you mean an individual write likes - like to leave in society ...

Hovewer, nowadays everyone is busy in their schedule; some are busy in study, some are in office - this phrase sounds odd; it seems like words are not used properly and do not match their places.

you have a lot of grammatical mistakes both in word spelling and sentence structure. I corrected some, but I am sure that there is still plenty of them. These errors obscure your points, making them difficult to comprehend.
OP vaishali1980 26 / 76  
Jul 1, 2010   #4
Thanks yerupaja_25 and Azeri

I tried to correct my mistake and rewrite the essay.
Tetanya 6 / 20  
Jul 1, 2010   #5
Once I had spoken with a new neighbor and told about my situation.

I think your give some interesting information in your essay, but it is very unordered. It might be better if you first wright your statement and then give examples.

I also think you should rewrite first para. Make it more interesting, it will be better if it hooks attention.
OP vaishali1980 26 / 76  
Jul 1, 2010   #6
Thanks Tatanya

I will try to rewrite my essay.
Mustafa1991 8 / 369  
Jul 1, 2010   #7
You can make that argument for America, which cherishes its individualism, but as for humans altogether, I don't know. I doubt the fragmentation has developed to the same extent in eastern earth.
OP vaishali1980 26 / 76  
Jul 2, 2010   #8
Mustafa1991
Sorry. I didn't get it what you want to say.

Can you tell me something easy way?
Mustafa1991 8 / 369  
Jul 3, 2010   #9
The generic prompt of sub-dividing ourselves at the base level of individuals assumes a western culture for the ambassadors of humans altogether. Community and collectivism are in opposition to our weakness, and so they are prevalent. I don't know if neighbor is just America, but at least make that note early on, to keep it running smoothly and stably.


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