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Even in this new era, millions of people still do not have enough food to eat

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Jan 13, 2020   #1

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry

Despite the fact that over the last century, farming methods and yields have improved dramatically, millions of people still do not have enough food to eat. There are myriads of reasons why starvation is happened among some countries which famine and harsh weather conditions are two of the major ones.

Hunger or lack of food affects only the weak. Whether or not they cultivate their food, the rich must make sure they have got enough on their plate. The weak neglect this purchasing power, unfortunately. They cannot have access to it, if food is not made available at concessional rate. Poor people do not own any property, most of the time. They are therefore unable to grow their own food. They have to buy their food and they cannot get their fill as food prices increase.

Climate change also causes starvation. In some countries, severe drought like conditions continue. For instance, it has not rained in years in some parts of Africa. People living in these areas are therefore unable to cultivate their crops. They rely on food grown in other region, and if that is not available, they will have to go hungry. Perhaps contributing to this issue are political reasons. Many countries are refusing to share with other countries their water resources. This is often exacerbated by the enmity between these nations. Sadly, in those counties that do not have adequate water supplies on their own, this activity affects food security.

Governments need to ensure that food is available to the poor free of charge or at concessional rates to solve this problem. Rich food-growing countries should demonstrate the magnanimity of sharing their surplus with poor countries that do not have enough food to feed their people. International organizations may play an important role in ensuring that nations share with those who need in their wealth and resources.

In conclusions, even in the 21st century, hunger continues to haunt millions of people. This is often exacerbated by the unequal distribution of wealth and resources. Rich countries and rich people can do a lot to make sure the poor have access to be basic necessity such as food as well.
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Jan 14, 2020   #2
I am not sure if you posted this as an English writing exercise or as a response to an English test prompt. If it is for an English test, please remember to post the prompt next time to receive a full review of your work and writing abilities. Now, let me deal with the errors in your writing. When you use the word "is", the next action must be in present tense or future tense. It cannot be used to refer to something that has happened in the past, as in past tense ( is happened = is happening). Do not use the term "weak" when you are referring to the state of a person's finances or status in life. The more appropriate term would have been "poor" or "financially challenged". Properties cannot be used to refer to agricultural land either as the term is a blanket reference to anything a person owns. You need to be specific in your references when discussing a particular topic. Be concise, be clear, use the correct reference words. That said, I got the point of what you were trying to say in the essay just the same. You did not not come across clearly in most instances but I managed to figure it out based on the supporting sentences in every paragraph.

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