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IELTS Writing: Number of phone services in US - line graph essay



oktaHrp 1 / 3  
Jun 3, 2014   #1
Given is the line graph presenting the overall spending on mobiles phone services and land line phone services throughout 2001 and 2010 in United States.

It is clear that expenditure cell phone services gradually increased. Opposite, spending on residential services fall steadily. The year 2006, consumer on mobiles overtook that for residential phones.

A closer look at the data reveals that in the first moment, an average of just over $200 rose quickly on expenditures of mobiles. By contras, consumers of residential services dropped slightly to just under $700. In around half decade, selling on cell phone increased dramatically to just above $450, while the figure of expenditure on land line phone services declined by nearly $200.

In 2006, on both on phone services outlaid the same figure at approximately $500 on each. In over the 10 years period, the average on cell phones had still risen around $750, while the figure on land line services had decreased to just over $400.


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fikri 5 / 310  
Jun 12, 2014   #2
Given is the line graph presenting the overall spending on mobiles phone services and land line phone services throughout 2001 and 2010 in United States.

the given line chart presents the overall spending on mobile phone service and line phone service throughout 2001 and 2010 in United States
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 30, 2014   #3
By contrast , consumers of residential services dropped slightly to just under $700.
I think you have followed the most appropriate approach for this task. Pay attention to eddies comments to improve your writing further. Overall, I think you have responded to this task very well :)


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