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The annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line services of Americans

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Feb 9, 2023   #1

spendings on on mobile phone, domestic and global fixed-line services

The following line graph visualizes the yearly expense on mobile phone, domestic and global fixed-line services of the USA from 2000 and 2010.

Overall, the figure of phone services had a tendency to decline gradually by the time. Meanwhile, the interior fixed-line services pattern grew up significantly. On the contrary, the worldwide one did not change by the time.

Turning to the mobile phone statistic, its price was reach nearly the peak in 2001 with $700 in 2001. Throughout the time, its cost declined imperatively about $50 each year. Subsequently, it only correctly $400 in 2010. However, the expense for the domestic service was just $200, which was also the lowest price in the graph. Subsequently, its cost suddenly grew up nearly $50 in each year to be the peak of the illustration with approximately $750.

Lastly, the international figure just increased slightly from 2001 to 2003, which was from $250 to $320. About the rest of the time period, the line of the worldwide expenditure was merely straight by the time and it were $300.

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Feb 10, 2023   #2
The presentation tends to be confusing in terms of sentence idea presentation. This is caused by the incorrect sentence formations and word usage throughout the essay. Your tendency to write in run-on sentences also did not help with the problem. You also did not properly use all of the necessary reference information in the presentation. Specifically, the year references are not fully utilized to help with information clarity in the presentation. It is important that you understand that all of the information provided in the essay must be used in the reporting and analysis. You failed to clearly indicate the decade and year references in a proper manner in the paragraphs. The writing leaves the reader confused in terms of referencing, which would leave you with an automatic failing GRA score.

My advice to you is this, practice writing simple, complex, and compound sentences first. Learn how it is structured. Then, learn the present, past, and future references of English words. How are these created? Memorize the time reference series for the most commonly used words. Build your vocabulary as well. Understand the meaning of the the words you are using or plan to use before you actually use it in the sentence. Since you are working on practice tests, you have the time to actually work on these aspects as you write the essay. Do these in the outline phase. Then time yourself when writing the actual essay. These are the most basic ways by which you can improve your English writing skills.

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