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Old and good friends are a treasure, we should spend our time with them rather than new ones



nastaranfarajza 1 / 1  
Jan 17, 2013   #1
I strongly agree with the notion of keeping old friends is more important.
Making new friend help people to get familiar with fresh idea and new way of living that may new friends possess. On the other hand old friends play significant role in their life for few reason that I mention bellow:

First of all, old friends are more familiar with our intimate life, our personal shortcoming and our strength points. We spend more times with them including harsh and happiest periods thus, this friends know us very well. for instance I have many friends but I have only one old friend , I got in trouble last month with my cellphone bill, I cannot afford it , I should to borrow some amount of money to pay my bill, I prefer to ask it from my old friend because I feel more convenient and relaxed.

Secondly, in healthy relationship trust served important role, we kept our old friend because we trust them, they know about our very well, they entered our house, met our family and know our problem, so if we have problem it is reasonable to ask them to help us to solve, and it is not likely for them to refuse our appeal. For example if I have secret, I would prefer to say it to my old, obviously my close friends.

Finally, people choose their friends by themselves, but cannot choose family or sibling, it is great opportunity to have friends, if we have good old friend why is necessary to replace or add new one? People like their old friends and get familiar with all aspect of their lives. There are like precious diamond, we should keep them, allocate some amount of time to spend with them thus if we success to be a good fellas, we have not any spare time to spend with new friend. In the other hand knowing new person, make relationship is time consuming task.

To wrap it up, old and good friends are a treasure, we should spend our time with them rather than new one, no one can replaced by old fellas thus it is better to keep them and enjoy our time with old friends.

thanh_bin90 2 / 5  
Jan 17, 2013   #2
In my opinion, your essay is good. My writing skill is very bad. :(((.
sanaqvi 6 / 11  
Jan 17, 2013   #3
I suggest little background before giving your opinion on the topic. For instance, Man is a social animal and we can't live without relations, one beautiful relation is friendship...
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 17, 2013   #4
I strongly agree with the notion of keeping old friends is more important.

Include this sentence in your introduction. Also, I prefer if you introduced the topic prior to expressing your view. The reason is that it's better to present your answer as an essay, and not as a direct answer to the prompt above.

First of all, old friends are more familiar with our intimate life, our personal shortcomings and our strengthspoints .

.... very good point :)
strong points or strengths.

We spend more times with them

.... spend time, and not times
We spend more time with them / I still remember the good times we had in college (here it refers to more than one instances)
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 19, 2013   #6
Secondly, in healthy relationship trust served important role, we kept our old friend because we trust them, they know about ourus very well, they entered our house, met our family and know our problem, so if we have problem it is reasonable to ask them to help us to solve, and it is not likely for them to refuse our appeal.

This is too long. You can easily split this into several sentences and that helps you to improve the clarity of your ideas. Avoid writing too lengthy sentences, because they easily get you distracted and also get the reader tired of remembering so many things.

Secondly, "trust"is a key aspect in a healthy relationship. We don't keep friendships with people whom we cannot trust because the friends know in and out about us.
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Jan 20, 2013   #7
hai..

you have good points...).

I feel it is not good to start an essay with your opinion. Start with a good sentance which an address the question. followed by your opinin.

Read more essays..
It will help You to improve your writting...).

Tessy


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