Advertising creates demand for products. With advertising, the companies can tell the consumers about their products and also if the consumers know about their products, the application for their products is increase immediately. However, advertising is necessary in free market economies. In the free market economies like the internet and social media, its can help the companies or the person to sell and to introduce their new products or their old products. If the companies or the person use the advertising massively, they can get a lot of income for that because they can do anything with advertising. Even though their own products are not good for the people but if the advertising to packaging the products is good, many people will buy the products. To controlling of the massive progress in advertising, it should be regulated. The regulation must been exist to make a rule about how to make a healthy advertising for the consumers, the products that can be on advertisements, and the others rules.
Hi mem77,
It is my dignity to share with you, so please apparently my sheet as well and give comments.
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Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections
Even though their own products are not good can acceppted for (...) many people will buy bought the products.
Maybe you used too much word like products then you can change to another word.
Hello, Edho. You wrote a well-written summary. Still, several revisions are necessary to build up your writing skill further. You may consider the following inputs:
- ... tell the consumers about their products.(full stop)andAlso, if the consumers know about ...
- However(inappropriate transitional phrase)On top of that , advertising is necessary ...
- . In the free market economies, like the internet and social media, itsit can help the companies (...) and to introduce their new products or their and old products.
- To Controlling of the massive progress in advertising, it should be regulated.
- The regulation must been existIt aims to make a rule about how to make a healthysafe advertising for the consumers, the products that can be on advertisementsadvertised , and the others rules.
There you have it. Hope this help!
hi..@mem77
let me try to correct your writing
Advertising creates demand for products. With advertising, the companies can tell ...
make your sentence straight to the point
for example,
Nowadays, advertising is able to attract people attention. As such, for some companies this is paramount not only to describe about their detailed products but also to increase their profit as citizens will decide to buy the products.
hope this helps,
thanks
jawa
