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Parents are the best teachers (they bring us up, teach us, love us)



linh202 11 / 21  
Jun 24, 2011   #1
Dear everybody,
Could you have me to check my essay?
Thanks a lot!!!!!!!!!!

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

From infanthood to adolescence, parents always have an extremely great impact on us, both positive and negative influence. From my personal angle, despite some of their bad behaviors, parents are still the best teachers that I have ever known because of the following reasons.

First and foremost, thanks to our parents, we can exist in this world and grow up like a true human being. They bear children and have responsibility for nurturing them. On being a small child, parents lull us to sleep, teach us how to speak, stand and walk. When we become the adolescent, parents often teach us the basic things to be a perfect person, for example, etiquette and behavior. Furthermore, the characteristics of parents also affect the young's personalities. For instance, my father never drinks alcohol or smoke cigarettes. Therefore, my brother usually refuses to drink wine and he also advises his friends to give up those bad habits.

Secondly, some people assume that only teachers are qualified to teach, but it is extremely troublesome to find an instructor who has an ability to pass down both academic knowledge and practical experience like our parents. For example, when I was a young student, I used to ask my father to help me solve the mathematics exercises, even though he is a merchant. As you see, our parents may be not specialized in all specific fields, but they have a kind of instinct to sacrifice for the betterment of their children. At school, children have many opportunities to learn science and art. In contrast, the schoolteachers do not train them to cook, weave or repair machines like our parents. They are not only a loyal friend but also a reliable consultant. They are willing to help us encounter the difficulties and share with us both happiness and sorrow.

Last but not least, parents give us passionate love and the feeling of a true family. Everything they sacrifice is derived from affection and the consciousness of responsibility. But for their love, we would not have grown up and soon become the miserable children. Schoolteacher can broaden our horizon, but only parents can help us understand how the importance of the family love is. For example, the orphan always feels unconfident and pessimistic because they never experience the wonderful feeling of being loved. In addition, our parents' love is an incentive for us to study, work and overcome the troubles in life.

In conclusion, parents are forever an excellent instructor that nobody is totally comparable with because they bring us up, teach us how to become a respectful person and also give us sincere love. All the lessons that we have learned from our parents are enormously rewarding and invaluable.

amrosca 4 / 130  
Jun 25, 2011   #2
Well, to be honest I feel like trying to approach matter from a different point of view won't compromise your opinion. If you put it right, it can even emphasize what you are trying to say. I'm mentioning this because in this particular case, there are lots of adolescents who won't be able to relate to what you're saying. However, this is just how I see it and I might be wrong. XD
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jun 26, 2011   #3
The first sentence of the essay is a statement-of-the-obvious. I think you should give an unexpected, interesting statement to catch the reader's attention. Can you add a "hook" sentence to make the reader feel interested?

Also, I think you should add one more sentence to the end of the first paragraph. It seems incomplete. I think you should add a thesis statement that expresses the main argument of the whole essay. If I asked you to tell me your reason for your opinion, could you explain it in a single sentence? That is the kind of sentence you should put at the end of the first paragraph.

Do you know what I mean? The last sentence of the first paragraph should be a sentence that expresses the main argument you are making, your strong argument.

For example, when I was a young student, I used to ask my father to help me solve the mathematics exercises, even though he is a merchant. As you see, our parents may be not specialized in all specific fields, but they have a kind of instinct to sacrifice for the betterment of their children.

This is excellent, but I have a different experience. When I see parents try to teach their kids, the kids do not want to listen! :-) I heard that in China sometimes martial artists would traditionally send their children to learn martial arts from a friend of the family instead of learning from parents. Sometimes a new person provides a formal atmosphere of respect.

I like your essay. And I like these thoughtful ideas from Ana, who always gives great feedback. Do you have any questions?

:-) Thanks for posting this great essay!


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