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IELTS Task 1 & Task 2 : Participation Levels in Science and Education


tyar32 10 / 14  
Aug 30, 2016   #1
TASK 1 : Participation Levels in Science and Education

The bar chats give information about participation levels in science and education depens developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. In general, industrialised countries was higher than developing countries in all catagories. In any case, there was a gradual increase in participation levels during 10 years.

Industrialised countries spent more years of schooling in 1980 and 1990. Industrialised countries need 11 years for schooling in 1990. Some conditions happen in participation of scientist and technicians, they was higher than developing countries in both years. Industrialised countries spent more money than developing countries in research and development. There was a significat growth in research and development of industrialised during from 1980 to 1990.

Averege years of schooling in both developing countries and industrialised countries was rose gradually. There was a significant increase in the participation of both countries in science. There was an interesting fact, although the spending money of industrialised countries for research increase sharply, developing countries fell dramatically.

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TASK 2 : The Trend of Work in Children

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ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Aug 30, 2016   #2
Hi Aziz,

I assume that to avoid suspension from this forum, you need to post a single essay in a single thread. A thread that consists of multiple essays is not allowed. Therefore, you need to post in separated thread next time.

Anyway, here's my contributions.

1st paragraph:
- The bar chatscharts give the information about participation levels in science and education depensdepends on developing and industrialised countries inbetween 1980 and 1990.
- In generalOverall, it can be seen that, industrialised countries waswere higher than any developing countries in all catagories.categories.
- In any caseIn this case , there was a gradual increase in participation levels during 10 years period .

2nd paragraph:
- Industrialised countries spent more years of schooling inbetween 1980 and 1990.
- Some conditions happenedin participationbecause of scientist and technicians, theytheir participationswaswere higher than any developing countries in both years.
- There was a significatsignificant growth in research and development of industrialised countriesduring from 1980 to 1990.

As you can see, your essay was suffering from structural or technical issues. Pay more attention to it next time. Good luck :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Aug 30, 2016   #3
tyar32, you are not allowed to post two writings in one thread. Stop doing this, otherwise, your account will get banned. Bear in mind!

When it comes to writing task 1, it is always good to include the picture of the graph. This helps readers understand what is being asked in the graph.

The bar chats give information about participation levels in science and education depens developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990

A breakdown of participation levels in science and education as per developing and industrialized countries is presented in the bar chart. The data is taken from 1980 to 1990, a 10-year period.

Some conditions happen in participation of scientist and technicians, they was higher than developing countries in both years.

this contains a grammatically incorrect sentence as two main sentences run together. How to solve this? You need to break it two or three sentences.

Hope this helps :D


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