Patience. What is your approach to problem-solving? TOEFL Independent Essay

* What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you? Use specific details to support your response.

Essay:

patience - the crucial key

Our lives can go as smooth as silk at times, yet, they tend to be harder and thicker at other times. We might face issues and problems. However, there is one paramount key that eases off all harsh situations. It is patience.

Patience is a strong term, sometimes tough to explain. A question is asked; what does patience have to do with problem solving?

It is the most fundamental when solving complicated issues. Learning how to be patient gives you the tools to manage your time wisely, find out, specifically, what is making you harm and, crucially, leads you to not lose your nerve when you are surrounded by worries and fears. For instance, looking through all successful people careers' debut, we can all agree on the fact that their progress was hard to achieve and their patience fed their hopes and dreams to be great so as they got through all the barriers they faced throughout their road to succeed

In addition, patience can take a wholly vast meaning as it symbolizes hope to change and to get over life issues. It is all about highlighting you problem solved and never taking your eyes off of it. I, personally, never doubt that I would figure out a way to change and correct my mistakes. That is how my beliefs and patience push me to keep on going.

To wrap up, people deal with problems in a variety of different ways. Yet, if you lack the crucial key called patience, you might end up being torn apart by the stakes and risks along the way.

The prompts asks you to answer "how does it work for you?". In your case, "how does patience solve problem for you". Thus you should have taken yourself as an example, explaining the way patience helps you overcome hardships.

However, in your third paragraph, you always wrote about "you". As a respondent, you should have used "I". Just because, say, when I asked "how are you?", you are supposed to answer "I'm fine", not "you are fine".

Majd, you are writing an academic essay. Therefore, the response needs to be direct and informative. You need not bother with flowery introductions to the topic as you do here. You are not only wasting space on the page, you are also wasting valuable time in developing your essay response. Since the reviewer will have only a few moments to decide whether or not to continue reading your essay, it is best to represent your response as soon as possible with this first paragraph. For a TOEFL essay, the first paragraph must only contain the following information DIRECTLY:

1. A restatement of the prompt - e.g People have different approaches to problem solving.
2. Introduction to the discussion - e.g.I have a particular approach to problem solving that works very well well for me.
3. Subject sentence - e.g. By applying patience to problem solving, I come up with the required solution to the problem.
4. Additional information - e.g. I will discuss how patience helps me solve problems by presenting details below.

Now, as Gang mentioned you need to use the pronouns "Me, myself, and I" within the paragraphs, in the most applicable forms because this essay is all about your opinion, your experiences, your reasons. Therefore, ownership of all statements is a requirement. Your generalized presentation does not bode well for the final consideration of your score because you have not given specific instances within the essay that relate to your experience of problem solving through patience.

Again, the mistake in the concluding statement. It is not the place for additional information. Just sum up the discussion points in the essay and close. Sum up:

1. The topic discussed
2. The response you gave
3. A summary of your reasons
4. closing sentence.

You almost fulfilled this requirement in your closing paragraph. The problem is that instead of saying "It is because of these reasons that I believe patience helps me solve problems." You created a new point of discussion by saying,


That created the opening for a whole new discussion instead of simply closing out the discussion.