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ducielts 1 / 2  
Jul 22, 2020   #1
Task: People have freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?



In the contemporary life, there is a common trend that thanks to the advances in interactive technology and transport, it is possible for humans to have jobs and accommodate in any areas of the world. From my perspective, the drawbacks of this tendency are outweighed by its benefits.

Freely choosing working and living places are still disadvantageous to some certain extent. Firstly, this could complicate the control of governments for their territories. Some remote areas which were deserted in the past are now needed to be taken care of because having people's lives means different problems such as crimes, environmental pollution or poverty can exist. Therefore, only by supervising them can ensure the stability and settlement. Secondly, settling in new regions requires a large amount of money for constructing facilities and infrastructure, which can guarantee the standards of living for the residents. For example, if there is an expectation of sheltering and working in the North Pole, where the only existing buildings are igloos of researchers and scientists, necessary constructions hospitals, schools and workplaces will be set up.

However, I would argue that the merits of having freedom to select working and living locations are more worth being taken into consideration. In terms of the personal advantage, this tendency enables workers to choose the most adequate occupations. Regardless of distances, it is easy for them to do their favourite jobs since transportation is currently widely covered over the world. Even authorities do not have to worry about the difficulty in managing those areas when they can easily get access to them. Moreover, from the social perspectively, allowing people to live everywhere can significantly ease the population pressure in major cities. Specifically, instead of clustering in a small number of metropolises, citizens can move to new established areas where governments also invest money in building facilities and ensuring the quality of life. This also shows that the investment in these areas is worth doing.

In conclusion, for the aformentioned discussions, despite some certain shortcomings of choosing living and working places flexibly, it seems to me that its benefits are more significant.

I find almost challenging to generate ideas for this essay and have spent nearly all of the 40 minutes' time to write this. Hope to have some of your suggestions. Thank you!

Bettie Orion 3 / 11  
Jul 23, 2020   #2
Hello! Here are some of my suggestions. Hope this helps!

+ In the contemporary life
+ "... to some certain extent". You should use "to a certain extent / to some extent" instead of "to some certain extent" (this phrase doesn't make sense)

+ In terms of the personal advantage
+ "Moreover, from the social perspectively"
+ move to newly established areas
OP ducielts 1 / 2  
Jul 23, 2020   #3
@Bettie Orion
thank you for your feedback, I will fix them in the next essay.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15466  
Jul 23, 2020   #4
Okay. You have not really delivered a clear opinion in the essay. You have not properly defended a single opinion based on the given discussion instruction. You must make sure that your 2 reasoning paragraphs are solely focused on delivering 2 reasons that support a single opinion. That is how you write this essay. It is because you did not clearly support a discussion angle that you found it difficult to write this essay.

All of these essays are based on a simple ground rule. Use your personal opinion based on personal experience, preference, knowledge, or public information. So when you feel that you are unfamiliar with a given topic, or you are unsure about what to write about, look for the clue in the discussion instruction. In this case the clue to writing this is based on whether you believe it is an advantage or disadvantage.

Consider then how you would like to work. If you were working now, would you like to have the ability to work remotely? If yes, why? If no, why? Answer that basic question and you will have your opinion based on your personal preference. Now, based on that preference, think about the 2 main reasons that pushed you towards that point of view. You will then have the 2 subject topics for your 2 reasoning paragraphs. For each paragraph, take one topic and expand on that reason through the use of supporting examples and explanations. Before you know it, you will have a proper outline and discussion draft for your essay.
OP ducielts 1 / 2  
Jul 23, 2020   #5
@Holt
Thank you for your thorough feedback.
In my opinion, the question of this task requires us to discuss both the advantages and disadavantages of the given trend, and give our opinion. Therefore, I've discussed the disadvantages in the 1st body and indicated the advantages and the reasons why the disadvantages are insignificant in the 2nd body.

I think discussing both the pros and cons is the requirement of this task.
Hope to receive your reply soon.


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