Hi, I will help you with some of the sentences in your essay.I cannot, however, totally agree this statement for it seems to imply that everyone can justifiably break laws that they think unjust.
I would omit the "however" and "totally," add a "with before "agree," and add an "are" at the end. Let me demonstrate:I cannot
, however, totally agree
with this statement for it seems to imply that everyone can justifiably break laws that they think
are unjust.
First of all, there is no gainsaying that laws are incomplete and have holes because human cognitive ability has limit.
"Gainsaying" is not a word I'm too familiar with. I would just use "denying" here. "Limit" should be plural.First of all, there is no
gainsayingdenying that laws are incomplete and have holes
in them because human cognitive ability has
limit.limits.You could also shorten it and write it this way:First of all,
there is no denying that laws are incomplete
and have holes in them because human cognitive ability has limits.
Yet sometimes when some bills pose a challenge to some people's cherished conviction, they may regard these acts inequitable, even contravening the moral code.
This sentence is wordy. I'll show you how to improve its style:Yet sometimes when some bills pose a challenge to some people's cherished conviction, they may regard these acts inequitable, even contravening the moral code.When people face financial pressures, however, they may view certain laws as inequitable.For example, the homosexual marriage law has successively been brought into effect in many countries.
I think this should be reworded to improve its style.For example,One example of a passed law that has proved difficult for some people to accept is the
law permitting homosexual marriage
law has successively been brought into effect in many countries .
Out of religious belief, many people consider it unjust and immoral.
Out of religious belief, manyMany people consider it
an unjust and immoral
law.given their religious beliefs.Except for this, abortion is another controversial issue all over the world.
Except for this, abortionThe abortion law is another controversial
issuelaw all over the world.
I hope that has helped you some :)