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People perceive change in different ways. Is it always for the better or not? Is vital for our lives



autumn_waltz 8 / 11  
Feb 26, 2015   #1
Some people prefer to spend lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that people perceive change in different ways. Some members of the community believe that change is always for the better, while others think otherwise.

Those who are in favor of change may argue that it poses a possibility for a particular person to improve themselves, both mentally and socially. From the mental perspective, changes relating to traveling and receiving education help people broaden their minds and accumulate new knowledge of a particular area. As for the social perspective - it is empathy for others that he or she may acquire after suffering changes in his or her private life, because it is known that those who experienced various changes in relationships with their families or acquaintances may then better understand other people's feelings. This way, change improves not only person's mental, but also social and private aspect.

In contrast, those who avoid changes point out the difficulties to readapt to them that many people experience. For instance, some large companies, Finnair for example, practice giving professional psychological and medicine support to those employees who were sacked due to companies' structural changes. Apparently, such policies infer that a spate of people may suffer from the difficulty to accustom to the changes and find their new way in life. In addition, it can be pointed out that changes regarding private affairs not always make a person better. For many people such changes simply cause a nervous breakdown, and, again, may jeopardize their health, since psychological aspect of a person is tightly connected to his or her general well-being.

In conclusion,I tend to partly agree with those who welcome change. Although I do not support the idea that it it is always a good thing, I admit that trying to avoid change is useless, since it is an indispensable part of our lives. For this reason, those who react to change positively and focus their efforts on taking advantage of it end up being in a better condition than those who are passive about it.

EF_Christopher - / 1  
Feb 26, 2015   #2
"From the mental perspective, changes relating to traveling and receiving education help one broaden one's mind and learn something new"

Good writing in your way to show both sides of the argument that you are presenting. But with this one sentence try rewording it so that the thought can flow more smoothly.
WDantigua 1 / 3  
Feb 26, 2015   #3
really well presented essay, id suggest you add more to your opinion or integrate it into one of the arguments and make the conclusion as something separate like a summary of it all.
Anfalia 40 / 46  
Feb 26, 2015   #4
It is true that people perceive change in different ways. Some members of the community believe that change is always for the better, while others think otherwise.

I think in this part, you miss your own opinion. you should put in your introduction.
here pattern of intro; (Hook, paraphrase prompt, your own opinion from the task)

person to improve him- or herself,

I don't say that this is wrong, bit it could be better if you point to general (they/them)

learn something new??

It's too general.

that he or shethey

[quote=autumn_waltz]with their familyies

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Good Luck!


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