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Some people think that allowing students to work part-time while studying has more advantages



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Oct 24, 2025   #1
Some people think that allowing students to work part-time while studying has more advantages than disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, it is undeniable that working part-time jobs have become increasingly popular with young people, especially students. It offers them many chances and benefits although it also has many disadvantages for students. My essay will give insights on both sides of this phenomenon before concluding that it is more positive or negative.
On the one hand, it is understandable why working part-time is associated with some benefits to students to some extent. Firstly, by doing part-time work, people can become more independent and have more confidence which provides them favorable conditions to be more ready for full-time jobs after graduating from schools. Because of these experiences, it can be easier for these students to adapt to a professional working environment in the future. Another reason is that it is highly beneficial for students to partake in part-time jobs due to the financial benefits which it offers for students. In fact, these students have to pay many other fees besides tuition fees such as rental fees or living expenses which can cause financial burden for their family. Therefore, working part-time jobs can help generate money to pay these expenses, allowing them to use money for other fields such as medical, travelling or buying some necessary things for their family.
On the other hand, admittedly working part-time jobs could have negative aspects for students. One notable reason for this view is that working temporary jobs can have an impact on the academic performance of students. Instead of concentrating on studying and practicing, they have to go to work until night after ending classes in schools. This leads to fatigue in physical health ( sự kiệt quệ về mặt thể chất ). Moreover, if they choose a working environment which is not suitable for them or have a bad boss , they can be exploited, forced to work long hours or even not paid fairly.
In conclusion,working temporary jobs is associated with many drawbacks, which far outweigh the positive aspects. It is recommended that students should balance both study at school and work temporary jobs. They should not focus on working too much because it's not their main purpose.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Oct 24, 2025   #2
There are 2 immediate reasons why this essay will get an automatic failing score. The first, is the word count. It is more than 300 words. This indicates that you have focused incorrectly on vocabulary usage instead of writing quality. During the actual test, the computer will cut you off at the end of the 40 minute marker. If you have not completed the essay by then, it will automatically receive a failing score due to its incompletely written presentation.

The 2nd reason, is that you included Vietnamese vocabulary / characters in the presentation. Since this is an English test, graded by English speaking natives, and not graded in Vietnam, you will be seen as in violation of the writing language regulations, so the essay will receive heavy points deductions, that will lead to a failing score at the end.

As the essay did not follow the single opinion and 2 paragraph defense of the expected response format, the essay will receive the lowest possible TA score as well. There is no clear writer's opinion nor supporting reasons for it in the first paragraph so the essay did not meet the preliminary scoring requirements.

Overall, while you have a good grasp of the English language, the previously mentioned errors will be the reason that you will not pass the test.


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