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The more people travel, the more rubbish are thrown away.



alvisphantom 2 / 2  
Oct 13, 2016   #1
Topic: Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?


I think this statement is true because the number of tourists have been increasing and this may cause negative effects on the country that people travel to. The more people travel, the more rubbish are thrown away. Besides, tourism can cause air pollution through exhaust emissions motorcycle engines and boats. Noise from transport and tourists can cause troubles for local residents as well. Moreover, the development of tourism activities lack of control may impact on the soil (erosion, landslides), threatened species of wild fauna and flora. As a result, the environment are becoming worse.

Overall, to solve this problem tourists should be aware of environmental protection. The government should enforce strict laws to prevent bad impact.

Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 34  
Oct 13, 2016   #2
HI alvis
here some suggestions for your writing

he number of tourists havehas been increasing

the environment areis becoming worse.

Overall, it is a kind of question of IELTS writing 2 which you need to write it at least 250 words
you need to paraphrase it before you answer the question
divide it in to 4 paragraphs or more, consist of introduction, body 1, body 2, and conclusion. in addition, add the sample in your body

Best wishes
Killua 5 / 9  
Oct 13, 2016   #3
Hi, alvisphantom, here are some suggestions.
==>... air pollution through exhausting emissions created bymotorcycle and boats engines. Noise of transport and tourists ...
==>Moreover, the development oftourism activities lack of controlinsufficient supervision of monitoring the tourism activies may impact on the soil (erosion, landslides) and therefore threaten wild species such as fauna and flora. As a result, the environment are becoming worsedestructed .

Good luck.
septiadara29 48 / 45  
Oct 14, 2016   #4
Hello alvispanthom, I will give you some opinions about your essay.

The first thing is you have to write your essay in 250 words. Keep it up on writting until more than 250 words, so you will get higher score.

For the introduction, you should give a background about this issue. For instance way, you only just repeat the background facts of the question above by using your own words (paraphrase) and give a summary about your think, such as agree or disagree. It will help you solve the problem about reach the limit number of words in an essay.

You have good ideas. You use 'multiple idea' and give some example. It is good and my suggestion may be you should give a conclusion in the last sentences of paragraph.

The other opinion is you should seperated between your disagreements facts in different paragraph.

The last is about conclusion. You have good sentences and give the reader/examiner about your solution, but maybe you should rerwite again about your disagreement state in different words and then give the solution in the last sentences.

Good luck
nguyeneze7496 3 / 2  
Oct 14, 2016   #5
Hello!
Let me give you some suggestions:

- the number of tourists have (has ) been increasing and this (that ) may cause ...
- ... pollution through exhaust emissions frommotorcycle engines (vehicles maybe better) and boats
justivy03 - / 2265  
Oct 14, 2016   #6
Hi Nguyen. please find additional suggestions below;

- I thinkbelieve this statement is true
- because the number of tourists havehas been - increasing and this may cause negative effects onin - the country thatwhere people travel to.
- through exhaust emissions from motorcycle engines and boats.
- Noise from transportmodes of transportation and - touristsmotorists can cause troubles
- Moreover, the development of tourism activities, ( don't forget your punctuation marks )
- lack of control may have an impact on the soil (erosion, landslides),
- threatened species of wild fauna and flora.
- As a result, the environment areis becoming worse.
- Overall, to solve this problemissue,
- strict laws to prevent bad impact to the environment .

There you have it Nguyen, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision.
Just to share, I believe people should have the liberty to travel anywhere they want and whenever they want, however, they have to be responsible, not leave trash or rubbish as you said and love the country they are visiting.


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