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The percentage of unemployment rates among women in several countries of the United Kingdom


Fauzi17 6 / 6 1  
Jan 21, 2016   #1
The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

A breakdown of the percentage of unemployment rates among women in several countries of the United Kingdom between 2013 and 2014 is illustrated in the bar chart. Overall, it is important to note that decreased female unemployment rate, except in Scotland. The highest number was released by Scottish in 2014, while the proportion in Northern Ireland showed a reverse.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, England had the greatest percentage of unemployed women in 2013 at 6.8%. However, there decreased by 0.3% in 2014. Interestingly, Scotland was the only country which had an increasing percentage of unemployed women. In 2013, it had 6.1% of women out of work. Afterwards, there increased to 6.7% women in 2014.

In 2013, 5.6% of Irish were unemployed. Following by the percentage of women unemployed experienced in Wales at 5.4% . Both countries saw a decrease in the percentage of unemployed women in 2014. In Northern Ireland, the percentage fell to 4.6% and in Wales it hit a through 5%.




yus72 6 / 6 1  
Jan 21, 2016   #2
@Fauzi17 let me give feed back to your essay

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vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 21, 2016   #3
There were very minimal errors in this essay. The mistakes you made were not enough to make a direct impact upon your final score are you presented highly accurate and informative information in the essay. Each paragraph is well developed and takes into consideration the fact that the reader would not have had access to the chart and therefore, needed a truly detailed analysis of all the information presented. Excellent work. I am sure this would have gotten a passing score in an actual setting.

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