Make a production of a film is conducting mathematic process, it is usa all the time at pixar movie. For instance, Tony gives one character from Toy Story's movie called "woody", he moved woody's location from one coordinates to the other coordinantes and he called that is a mathematic process, named "geometric coordinate". Not only that, he shows how Translation (in mathematical formula) is works in the process of make the move, scaling, multiply, value in mathematics was also in used.
In the end of the the talks, he shows the audience about 3D software demo, how he rotates one object and shows the trigonometry's relation to the 'rotating process of the object'. He also demonstrate how to make a smoth #d animation shape surface using a different 3D software from his notebook. He anded the talks by said "Pixar use that mathematic concept all the time they made in every single sequences of the movie"
Summarized from TED talks, by Tony Derose.
Hi Gabriel, with regards to your question, I assume that it wasn't a contest. As I remember, it was "daily" assignments from a private institution that focuses on IELTS. Previously, they only uploaded those summaries on Facebook. I have no idea why they switched their rule to upload all of them here. This makes the website has become quite crowded recently. I just hope that moderator(s) in this forum can take an immediate action to reduce/handle the crowd.
However, I would like to keep giving my best suggestion and feedback towards the OP of this thread.
Hi Fadhil, I can see that you've confused on how to create a well-written summary. You can see my feedback in the detailed descriptions below.
- First thing first, activate your spell-checker and grammar-checker on Microsoft Word to help you notice whether the sentences or words that you have written are correct or not. Most of the writers who wrote summaries were ignoring this simple-but-effective method.
- Then, you can start write the main point of what you've heard so far. Perhaps, you can indirectly quote by saying that the speaker "Tony Derose" in TED Talks video mentioned that ..........
- Link your sentences by using proper referencing. The words "he/she", "they", "it", "this" are simple words that can link the sentences together. If you think you need more, you can use some cohesive devices such as "furthermore/moreover/in addition/additionally/many more". Well-written summary/essay is an essay/summary which has good coherent. This is also important in IELTS because coherence and cohesion is one of the four essential criteria in IELTS writing.
As you can see Fadhil, I hope the above-mentioned feedback would be beneficial towards your writing skill development later on. Good luck for the next practice :)
HI Muhammad, below are my suggestions for your summary;
First of all, the way you plot your summary is quiet confusing, confusing because you seem to create a different strategy in approaching this writing project, different in a way that the sentences doesn't seem to fit. The construction of your ideas are very unconventional, it almost as if doesn't have any idea or thought at all, this is how confusing it is.
Anyhow, everything can be learned and one thing that can be done is to practice the language more often, create a journal where you log you progress and just simply reading, this exercises will help you a lot.
Moving on to your summary, please find the observations in the following notes;
- MakeCreating a production of a film
- is like conducting a mathematicl process,
- it is usa all thethis can be seen in almost all US movies all the time at a pixar movie.
- is works in the process
- of makemaking the move,
- scaling, multiplying , value in mathematics
- wasis also in used.
There you have it Muhammad, I hope my remarks are helpful and even more valuable to your revision.