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"Pohela Falgun" - The custom of my country that I like most and will encourage to follow TOEFL essay



jon_snow 8 / 28  
Mar 11, 2014   #1
This is the most devilish toefl essay prompt that I have encountered ever. Even I had to modify my essay structure to write this. The problem I faced here is, there is no suitable supporting materials to support my claim. My country has many customs that I love to share, however, i could not find good supporting detail to write a good body paras for any of them. It is hard when you have to write an essay in a time constrain manner and you could not find any supporting material to support your essay in your brainstorming session. anyway here it is. feel free to comment and give me some advice how to tackle this kind of unusual questions.

Question: Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples.

Answer:

Different countries have different customs and traditions. On the same note, my country also has some customs. The custom of my country that I like most and will encourage people from other countries to adopt is celebrating "Pohela Falgun". "Pohela Falgun" is the 1st day of the Falgun month- a month of Bangla calendar. There are several reasons why I encourage people of different countries to follow this particular custom, however, I will discuss about two here.

First reason is, this custom is very colorful. We celebrate "Pohela Falgun" on February 13th -according to Gregorian calendar, therefore, the weather is really good. At the time of the year, in February, trees have passed the harsh winter and spring just arrived. Therefore, most of the trees have new green leaves and flowers. As a result, nature itself looks more fresh and colorful. Moreover, on that particular day, people of my country take a festive look. Girls wear green 'Shari'- traditional dress for girl's of my country. They also use flowers to ornate themselves. On the other hand, boys wear green or yellow 'Panjabi'- a popular man's wear of my country. Boys and girls of different ages hang out with their friends. Moreover, some cultural organizations arrange cultural programs around the city as well as in village. As this is so colorful, therefore, i like to expand this culture to different people of different countries.

Another reason is that, this is a special day for us. We spend this day with our family and friends. For instance, this year I celebrated the "Pohela Falgun" with my friends. We all wore the traditional dress and at the morning, we went to the "rabindra sarbar" where cultural program was arranged by a leading cultural organization name "kristi". We enjoyed their performance so much. After the cultural program had ended, we took some photos of our own. When the photo session was over, we went to a nearby restaurant and took traditional food. As you can see, I had lots of fun with my friends on this day.

In sum, as "Pohela Falgun" is colorful and a fun day to spend with friends, therefore, I believe it will be a good addition to the people of different countries.

Abdurasul 32 / 78  
Mar 11, 2014   #2
We spend this day with our family and friends.

I think it is better to write : "We spend this day with loved ones."
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Mar 11, 2014   #3
This is the most devilish toefl essay prompt that I have encountered ever. Even I had to modify my essay structure to write this. The problem I faced here is, there is no suitable supporting materials to support my claim. My country has many customs that I love to share, however, i could not find good supporting detail to write a good body paras for any of them. It is hard when you have to write an essay in a time constrain manner and you could not find any supporting material to support your essay in your brainstorming session. anyway here it is. feel free to comment and give me some advice how to tackle this kind of unusual questions.

Well, this topic sounds more like a speaking task topic. If so, you don't have to elaborate so much on this :D

On the same note, my country also has some specific customs.

The custom of my country that I like most and will encourage people from other countries to adopt is celebrating "Pohela Falgun".

In my country, there is one particular custom called "Pohela Falgun", which I like the most and wish everyone in the world would celebrate it just like my countrymen.

There are several reasons why I encourage people of different countries to follow this particular custom, however, I will discuss about two here.
OP jon_snow 8 / 28  
Mar 12, 2014   #4
thanks pahan :)
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 12, 2014   #5
First reason is, this custom is very colorful.

.... Add more spice to this sentence ;)
First reason is that this custom is a very colorful event that brings so much brightness into our routine lives.

. At the time of the year, in February, trees have passed the harsh winter and spring just arrived. Therefore, most of the trees have new green leaves and flowers.

February is the time that spring just arrives. The trees would bear their new freshly green leaves.

As this is so colorful, therefore, i like to expand this culture to different people of different countries.

... I don't understand why you included this sentence here in this essay. For me, it does not look like a requirement.
OP jon_snow 8 / 28  
Mar 12, 2014   #6
thanks dumi. You always write informative comments.

jon_snow:
As this is so colorful, therefore, i like to expand this culture to different people of different countries.
... I don't understand why you included this sentence here in this essay. For me, it does not look like a requirement.

i wrote that to restate my reason and to make a connection with the prompt and my position... however, after reading this again i found that redundant too.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 13, 2014   #7
i wrote that to restate my reason and to make a connection with the prompt and my position... however, after reading this again i found that redundant too.

Well, I think I have asked a wrong question :( I had not followed your prompt properly and really sorry about it. :( I just saw it is a part of the prompt.

Also, I want to ask you whether this is for a writing task or a speaking task. This is not likely a writing task prompt. However, if it is for a speaking task, then let me know and I can suggest you a good structure for that :)
OP jon_snow 8 / 28  
Mar 13, 2014   #8
Well, I think I have asked a wrong question :( I had not followed your prompt properly and really sorry about it. :( I just saw it is a part of the prompt.

that's ok dumi... :)
anyway, i found it in ets's 180 questions for independent writing. however, notefull suggested that, that prompt is for independent speaking too. For speaking section, currently i am following notefull strategy.. It's little bit challenging to give 2 example with reasons and with a conclusion in 45 seconds. anyway, i will really appreciate if you give some alternative suggestions/ strategies on speaking.

by the way, i have a question in my mind. As I saw some IELTS takers uploading their writing task 1 here, so i am wondering, is there any way to upload my integrated writing? As it contains reading and listening part so i am little confused, how to upload the audio. however, I can make a transcript of that audio, but it's a tedious job; u know. :(

it will be very helpful if you give me some suggestion in this regard... :)

a million thanks to you both (you and pahan) for your constant support :)
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 13, 2014   #9
by the way, i have a question in my mind. As I saw some IELTS takers uploading their writing task 1 here, so i am wondering, is there any way to upload my integrated writing? As it contains reading and listening part so i am little confused, how to upload the audio. however, I can make a transcript of that audio, but it's a tedious job; u know. :(
it will be very helpful if you give me some suggestion in this regard... :)

Of course you can seek help for the Integrated task. You may upload the reading section using the Attach file(s). However, I wonder whether others would be able to read it clearly. Also, I don't think you can upload the audio tape. However, you can type your response in the message block and we would surely get some sense of contents of the audio. I think I would be able to help you with that task providing some insights on the structure and the style of writing it. :)
OP jon_snow 8 / 28  
Mar 14, 2014   #10
okay, i will definitely give it a try... :D


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