Ielts: most popular sports - the pie chart

The pie chart below provides us with the information about most popular sports among people aged 5-14 years old. The indexes are given in percentages.

Overall, it can be said that the highest percentage of popularness belongs to soccer(26%), whilst karate(8%) and other sports(4%) apart from swimming, baseball, basketball and volleyball have the lowest indications.

In more details, the most popularized type of sport among the people of these ages next to soccer is swimming activities(22% respectively). It is interesting to note that sports such as: volleyball and basketball own the same percentages(11%). In addition, baseball has 7% more than basketball and volleyball(18%) and as a result ranks the third place.

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I guess this is your Overview statement. However, in the overview you do not give details e.g.


Instead you talk about the major trend / trends very briefly to give the reader an overall picture about what the image presents.
Also, have at least two detailed paragraphs.

As Pahan and fikri mentioned, you need to have your image uploaded. Without seeing the graph it is very difficult for us to provide you with more meaningful feedbacks.

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Of course, I will take it into my consideration the next time!

Thank you! Now I have uploaded the picture) I will wait for your comments)

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Overall, it can be said that the highest percentage of popularnesspopularity belongs to soccer(26%), whilst karate(8%) and other sports(4%) apart from swimming, baseball, basketball and volleyball have the lowest indications.


Well, in the overview you do not give details (e.g. 26%, 22% ), but discuss the main trend/ trends briefly to give the reader a background idea of the image presentation.

E.g.
Overall, Soccer had been the most popular game while Swimming and Baseball took the second and third places in their popularity.

Dear Pahan and MisterWandering thank you very much! What can you say about coherence and grammar??