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The most popular transport in Edmonton. Cars represent more than 2/5 of all transportation types.



Ester Napitupulu 18 / 25  
Apr 11, 2016   #1
The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The pie chart illustrates the proportion of inhabitant's transportation in Edmonton and the table shows the reasons of using car in inner city. It is measured in percent. Overall from the first chart, the most favorite transportation is car, and mostly they utilized it for commuting to work.

Most citizen in Edmonton used car as their transport facilities, representing more than two fifths of all the transportation types. It can be seen, people in this inner city preferred to utilize Light Rail Transit (LRT) than bus or taxi, it is only 10 % lower than using car, about 35%. They also used taxi and bus at only 10 % for each type.

From the table, commute to work is the most reason why people used car as their vehicle, more than half of all people's reason. Secondly was doing business, about 45% and closed to this position was taking children to school, only a 5% difference. From these three reasons, people utilize car for their routine activities along day and other reasons were shopping and for their leisure activities, about 15% each reason.


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La Baso 15 / 21  
Apr 11, 2016   #2
Dear writer.
... the table shows the reasons of using car in inner city. It is measured in percent. better if you say both are measured in the percentage.

keep writing
justivy03 - / 2265  
Apr 16, 2016   #3
Hi Ester, let's see if there's any progress with your analysis, I know there will be and I know that you pay attention to the given suggestions in your analysis and overall to your writing skills.

- proportion of inhabitant'speoples ( people - human being / inhabitants - other living thing aside form humans ) - using cars in the inner city.
- It is measured in percentage .
- Overall,from the first chart,
- shows the most favorite
- car,( a comma is not necessary when the idea is followed by the word "and" ) and mostly
- they utilized itthis for commuting to work.

- seen,that people in

- is one of the most reason
- SecondlyNext iswas doing business,
- about 45% and closed to this position
- alongduring the day and
- other reasons were for shopping
- about 15% each reasonrespectively .

There you have it Ester, I hope the corrections help and with your essay, they left me curios, do you have to repost it when you do the revision?, I ask because, I never read any revision from analysis done by anyone.

Anyway, I wish to review more of your work soon.
nabila05 8 / 11  
Apr 16, 2016   #4
Hi, Ester. I would like to say that you actually have a great potential in writing because your writing is very understandable. However, please be more careful in composing some sentences. Because there is no adverb of time in this task, it is suggested to use Present Simple. Please mind the correction below:

- Most citizen in Edmonton used car as their transport facilities. It should be written: Most citizen in Edmonton use car as their transport facilities
- It can be seen, people in this inner city preferred to utilize... It should be written: It can be seen, people in this inner city prefer to utilize

- They also used taxi and bus at only 10 % for each type. This sentence should be written: They also use taxi and bus at only

There you are, Ester. I hope my insight is helpful towards your future enhancement in writing.

Best of luck and keep writing :)


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