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Possibility of space tourism and its impact on astronomic


phong4703 1 / -  
Mar 29, 2021   #1
A new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exprloration.

How true do you think it is?


How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today?

In 21 st century, it is evident that the space industry is experiencing booming development. Hence, the wealth have an idea of applying tourism into space domain by using private investments. From my perspective, this is now possible due to the state-of-the-art resources and wide-range knowledge they can afford.

To embark with, living outside our planet in a long period is no longer beyond imagination. The indispensible conditions that support human's life such as: nutriants, water, oxygen, .... is now able to be created artificially ; transported, preserved in a long journey and also have capability of bearing harsh environment. Moreover space technology is more and more advanced over time, which garuantees human's safety by specialized safety requeriments and eradicates scepticism about risk.

Having big potential in the near future, however, the impact of tourism on astronomy's researches is negligible. Even those two share the same exploiting object, space travelling bases on places that has been discovered , while astronomy and astronauts put their effort on seeking for new galaxy knowlegde.

To recapitulate, I think space tourism can probably be not only a novel path but also a major part of commercial business. Whereas, it's effect on astronomic is not too considerable.

P/s: Could you mark this task after making comments? Thanks a lot!
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,535 3447  
Mar 29, 2021   #2
Right off the bat, I can tell you that this essay will not get a passing score because of the severe deductions you will get for writing less than 250 words. You only wrote 202 words, which means the missing 48 words will have corresponding percentage deductions applied to your overall presentation. Then there are the GRA problems since you are using 2 punctuation marks successively, a comma and ellipses, which is never done in academic or creative writing. Yes, that will mean additional points deductions. The paragraphs need to be properly formatted and run-on presentations should be eliminated. Write at least 3 sentences per paragraph to meet the word requirement.

Basically, you have too many errors in this writing to get a passing score. My suggestion is that you try to focus on proper sentence formatting and development. Use sentence building exercises to help you become better at properly creating simple and complex sentence presentations. You need to focus less on your essay writing for now and more on English writing skills development first.


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