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I am preparing for TOEFL and here is my essay. Could you please help me to improve my writing.
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Question:- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Progress is always good. Use specific reasons and details to support answer.
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In today's world we have progressed a lot from lifestyle to the technology and we will progress a lot more in the future, but has any one thought about how we made this progress. The answer is negative. It is well known saying that in order to go forward, one has to make great amount of sacrifices and compromises. Certainly, it makes me clear that progress does not always come alone, but it also brings few disadvantages with it which affect our lives.
We are living in the world of advancement where we can see a development in the society and industries. This progress makes our lives more comfortable and easier. However, we have to look on the flip side of this progress and to think about how much we have sacrificed in order to make ourselves convenient. For instance, we are cutting down more and more trees in order to expand cities and industrial areas, which results in deforestation. Deforestation causes many species and animals to lose their habitats, which impact our ecological balance. Moreover, less trees on the earth results in producing more carbon dioxide and less oxygen, which affect our environment severely. I think it is very simple that we are losing our natural environment in order to get progressed.
In this fast paced world progress has become one of the causes for destroying communication and interactions among people. We are running like a machine or robot in order to fulfill our dreams and goals. For instance, some people want to have promotion in their professional carrier, while other want to have a big house in their life. In order to achieve all those goals, we forgot who we actually are! As a result, we are keep getting away from our friends and family, and it increases generation gap between us and our children. Hence, I believe progress is the one which is responsible for destroying communication. Does any one think about all these negative impacts of being progressed?
Given the evidences, it seemed to me that progress is always precarious. It can come in many desirable forms, but also brings unwanted things as well. I strongly agree that every step toward the progress requires suffering and sacrifices.
I am preparing for TOEFL and here is my essay. Could you please help me to improve my writing.
Thanks in advance.
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Question:- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Progress is always good. Use specific reasons and details to support answer.
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In today's world we have progressed a lot from lifestyle to the technology and we will progress a lot more in the future, but has any one thought about how we made this progress. The answer is negative. It is well known saying that in order to go forward, one has to make great amount of sacrifices and compromises. Certainly, it makes me clear that progress does not always come alone, but it also brings few disadvantages with it which affect our lives.
We are living in the world of advancement where we can see a development in the society and industries. This progress makes our lives more comfortable and easier. However, we have to look on the flip side of this progress and to think about how much we have sacrificed in order to make ourselves convenient. For instance, we are cutting down more and more trees in order to expand cities and industrial areas, which results in deforestation. Deforestation causes many species and animals to lose their habitats, which impact our ecological balance. Moreover, less trees on the earth results in producing more carbon dioxide and less oxygen, which affect our environment severely. I think it is very simple that we are losing our natural environment in order to get progressed.
In this fast paced world progress has become one of the causes for destroying communication and interactions among people. We are running like a machine or robot in order to fulfill our dreams and goals. For instance, some people want to have promotion in their professional carrier, while other want to have a big house in their life. In order to achieve all those goals, we forgot who we actually are! As a result, we are keep getting away from our friends and family, and it increases generation gap between us and our children. Hence, I believe progress is the one which is responsible for destroying communication. Does any one think about all these negative impacts of being progressed?
Given the evidences, it seemed to me that progress is always precarious. It can come in many desirable forms, but also brings unwanted things as well. I strongly agree that every step toward the progress requires suffering and sacrifices.