The proportion of Bulgarian residents who chosen to live abroad at the level of 8 percent - IELTS

The bar chart illustrates changes the number of emigration from Bulgaria aged 15 to 60 years old in 2001 and 2006. And is measured in percentage. At first glance, it is evidence that the number of people who have no intention to move or prefer to stay are highest tan other categories.

With regards 100% Bulgarians according to data, 75 percent of individuals preferred to stay in their country in 2001. Over following five years, there was a slight decrease by 3 percent. While, the number of citizens who lived abroad for a short time also diminish virtually a half from 9% to 5%.

Turning to the level of inhabitants who became tourists or visitors solely 6 percent and it rose to 10 percent in the last year. Then, another has a similar pattern, the proportion of Bulgarian who worked abroad then return stood at 4% and this increased roughly double to 7%. The proportion of residents who chosen to live abroad permanently still same in 5 years at 8 percent.

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The bar chart illustrates changes the number of emigration from Bulgaria aged 15 to 60 years old in 2001 and 2006.

My review :
The bar chart illustrates the number of emigration changes in Bulgaria aged 15 to 60 years old between 2001 and 2006.

1. Number and percentage are considered as a different measurement. Here, please read carefully the data whether it is measured in 'number' or 'percentage'.
2. For introductory paragraph, better you only write one sentence; for overview, you may write two sentences.
3. Make sure you use the correct tense. In this case, you should write in the past tense since the time frame shown is '2001 and 2006'.
4. Word formation errors and spelling issues: are highest tan > 'are higher than'
Here is my editing and please peruse the changes:
The bar chart illustrates what Bulgarians aged 15 to 60 intended to do in 2001 and 2006, and is measured in percentages. At first glance, it is evident that the percentage of people who had no intention to leave Bulgaria were far higher than those with other intentions.

Hope this helps you ~ Shinta

Hello Mr Irfan
With regards 100% Bulgarians i assume this is unnecessary data for your paragraph.

The proportion of residents who chosen to live abroad permanently still same in 5 years at 8 percent.
this is my sentences :

The rest, the dwellers who prefer to became a permanent residence in another country remain stable at 8 % over the following period.

Hope this helps..