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The proportion of monthly temperatures and the averages number of hours of sunshine per year


putri22 33 / 33 5  
Feb 9, 2016   #1
The average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in Sydney, London and New York are illustrated in the line graph and the table. Overall, it can be seen that in the beginning and the end of the period, the average monthly temperatures has same pattern in which Sydney has the highest temperatures and is followed by London and New York. Also, New York is the city that has the longest time to be brightened by sunshine.

According to the data, in the first three months, Sydney has the highest temperatures in around 25 degree. Then, it is followed by London in about 10 degree. Although New York is the lowest at that time, it has upward tendency in the next months.

Surprisingly, from May to September, the pattern totally changes in the opposite way, whereas New York becomes the city which has the highest temperatures and Sydney has the lowest. However, London is still in the second position in around 20-25 degree. Next, the last three months exactly have the same pattern with the first three months.

Turning to the total annual hours of sunshine, New York has the longest time receiving the sun light than other cities. It has 2,535 hours while Sydney and New York have 2,473 and 1,180 hours respectively.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Feb 9, 2016   #2
... that in AT the beginning and... temperatures has HAD THE same pattern in which Sydney has HAD the highest temperatures and is WAS followed by London and New York. ... city that has HAD the longest time to be brightened by sunshine.

... in DURING the first three months, Sydney has HAD the highest temperatures in AT around 25 degreeS. Then, it is WAS followed by London in WITH about 10 degreeS. Although New York is WAS the lowest at that time, it has HAD AN upward tendency....

- THESE EVENTS ALREADY HAPPENED THEREFORE, THE PAST TENSE SHOULD BE USED.

... the pattern totally changes D in the opposite way , whereas New York becomes BECAME the city which has HAD the highest temperatures and Sydney has HAD the lowest. However, London is WAS still in the second position in AT around 20-25 degreeS. Next, the last three months exactly have the same pattern with AS the first three months.

- TEMPERATURES IS ALWAYS DEFINED IN DEGREES OF MEASUREMENT.

... New York has HAD the longest time receiving the sun light than other cities. It has HAD 2,535 hours while Sydney and New York have REGISTERED 2,473 and 1,180 hours respectively.

- INCREASE THIS PARAGRAPH BY ONE MORE SENTENCE IN ORDER TO BE FORMAT COMPLIANT.


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