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TOEFL writing; I'm against providing more money to professors



Tiffany Lin 3 / 5  
May 18, 2014   #1
Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money in salaries for university professors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

University education is always an important part of one's life. That's why education in university is discussed all the time. What is the best way to orientate the students? Raising the salaries of professors so? I would say no. The professors are essential, however, the schools are established for students. Money should spend on facilities in school or update resources, which are beneficial to school rather than just instructors. The following are my opinions.

To begin with, the school should put more emphasis on students instead of professors. I think the most efficient way to improve the education is to guide the students to learn actively. By renewing some facilities in school so students will spend more time at school doing assignment. A comfortable environment can attract people to stay longer. Thus, students spend more time on school to make a good circulation of learning. That is to say, students have a better environment to working on their assignments so the quality of their assignments will improve. Thus, the competition between peers enhances and forms a circulation. In my school, the classrooms in my university are old and kind of shabby. For me, I prefer spending money in a coffee shop to staying at school to finish my assignment. It's unpleasant to stay at school. However, coffee shops are not always quiet, so my classmates and I often finish our work roughly.

Besides, the ultimate purpose is to change, to motivate students to be better. To improve education, spending more money to raise professors' salary is inappropriate. In addition, will the university filter all the professors overall? Some professors don't deserve the money at all, then, what's the point to spend money on them? High-salary instructors don't teach students harder because they earn more money. There won't be any effect if school does so. There was news about raising professors' salary in my country. This event provoked a demonstration composing of students mostly. The proposal of the demonstration was eliminating the raising salaries. As you can see, if the policy of raising salary was supported, the demonstration would not happen.

At school, students are priority. Students' tuition is not only for the professors but also for their quality of learning at university. That's the main reason I against providing more money to professors. Students are those who suppose to enjoy the use of their tuition.

thanks for correcting errors.

dumi 1 / 6795  
May 19, 2014   #2
University education is always an important part of one's life. That's why education in university is discussed all the time. What is the best way to orientate the students? Raising the salaries of professors so? I would say no. The professors are essential, however, the schools are established for students. Money should spend on facilities in school or update resources, which are beneficial to school rather than just instructors. The following are my opinions.

Better conclude your intro with a clear statement on your position on the argument.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
May 19, 2014   #3
The following are my opinions.

You cannot have too many opinions on one issue. Your opinion should be either agree to the statement or not.
OP Tiffany Lin 3 / 5  
May 19, 2014   #4
University education is always an important part of one's life. That's why education in university is discussed all the time. What is the best way to orientate the students? Raising the salaries of professors so? I would say no. Schools are established for students. So, I think money should spend on facilities in school or update resources rather than instructors' salaries.

Is it better?

Thank you.
dumi 1 / 6795  
May 20, 2014   #5
Besides, the ultimate purpose is to change, to motivate students to be better. To improve education, spending more moneyallocating more funds in the budget to raise professors' salary is inappropriate and does not serve the purpose. (anyway, this is your opinion which you already told the reader. You should not keep reinstating that in the body paras. In conclusion you can do that)


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