'The quest to be Lake City's new mayor' - Argument writing

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Golnar

When Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City four years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. But since then, McAllister has made public her commitment to environmental causes. She would be wise, therefore, to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu . On the recommendation of a small group of concerned citizens, Mayor Yu prohibited automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks, and therefore was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville. This action would have great appeal to the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community's recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister's success in her current quest to be Lake City's new mayor.

This argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that the problems of Lake city and Plainsville are the same, rendering its main conclusion, the Lake city will follow the success of Plainsville. On this account, social factors play remarkable role in solving the problems of cities. To illustrate, life conditions in societies are so different that they should be considered in order to solve the problems in cities; moreover, not only are the conditions important, but people who live there are also more substantial aspects to indicate whether close of parks in Lake city will affect Lake city's difficulties same as the closing of the parks in Plainsville or not.

More significantly, the argument states that recycling program will granteed the success for Lake city. If the problems do not come from pollutions that recycling program can solve this problem, the argument is without basis. Likewise, scientific features form an integral part of the system in order to ameliorate the Lake city. As a matter of fact, scientific teams are needed to investigate what is the main problem in the city in order to find the best way of improvement. The argument would have been more strong had it provided more information about regarding investigations so that they can find the beneficial way of solving problems.

The argument cannot provide any justification that in case former mayer of Plainsville who closed the parks in order to avoid the authomobile traffic, this can be one of the his goals and there would be many other reasons for this activity; therefore, it is not logical that McAllister bring appropriate life for citizens by just closing parks. In addition, in the Lake city should investigate all parameters that are considerable in order to make environment calm.

because the argument provide several unwarranted assumptions that it fails to make any convincing case about the fact that Lake city is definitely will follow the success of other place like Plainsville without any investigation about the similarity between two theses cities.

Hi there, I know your forum recently, and I don't know how I can your comments about my writings. one of is here, I appreciate you to guide me more.

your sincerely,
Golnar

When Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City four years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. But since then, McAllister has made public her commitment to environmental causes. She would be wise, therefore, to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu . On the recommendation of a small group of concerned citizens, Mayor Yu prohibited automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks, and therefore was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville. This action would have great appeal to the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community's recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister's success in her current quest to be Lake City's new mayor.

Try to put some introduction here.What are the reasons ? What arguer is saying? How you are contending? Rather than starting with "This argument is flawed"The given argument concludes that it would be a wise decision for Ida McAllister to announce her decision to prohibit automobile traffic to all Lake City parks in accordance with her commitment to environmental causes. The arguer concedes that this action would ensure that Ida McAllister wins the forthcoming elections to the mayor of Lake City despite the fact that she had lost by a huge margin during the elections for the same post four years ago. The arguer cites the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu, who had implemented similar restrictions in Plainsville as a result of which she had earned appreciation for solving pollution problems and improving the lifestyles of the people of Plainsville. The arguer further states that the people of Lake City would find this action appealing as most of them participate in the community's recycling program as well. However, the argument is found to be lacking in several respects and it fails to convince the reader that the action being suggested by the arguer would indeed be a wise one for Ida McAllister.

This argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that the problems of Lake city and Plainsville are the same, rendering its main conclusion, the Lake city will follow the success of Plainsville. On this account, social factors play remarkable role in solving the problems of cities. To illustrate, life conditions in societies are so different that they should be considered in order to solve the problems in cities; moreover, not only are the conditions important, but people who live there are also more substantial aspects to indicate whether close of parks[The argument didn't mentioned close of parks.It is just banning of automobiles in parks ] in Lake city will affect Lake city's difficulties same as the closing of the parks in Plainsville or not.

More significantly, the argument states that recycling program will granteed the success for Lake city. If the problems do not come from pollutions that recycling program can solve this problem, the argument is without basis. Likewise, scientific features form an integral part of the system in order to ameliorate the Lake city. As a matter of fact, scientific teams are needed to investigate what is the main problem in the city in order to find the best way of improvement. The argument would have been more strong had it provided more information about regarding investigations so that they can find the beneficial way of solving problems. This part is not weakening the argument,rather you should contend that :

The fact that most of the citizens of Lake City actively participate in the community's recycling program does not necessarily mean that they all are environmental enthusiasts who are concerned about pollution related problems. It is likely that they are interested in recycling due to some monetary benefits that may be involved in the recycling program.

The argument cannot provide any justification that in case former mayer of Plainsville who closed the parks in order to avoid the authomobile traffic, this can be one of the his goals and there would be many other reasons for this activity; therefore, it is not logical that McAllister bring appropriate life for citizens by just closing parks. In addition, in the Lake city should investigate all parameters that are considerable in order to make environment calm.

It is likely that Lake City does not have any serious pollution problems and so, the restriction of automobile movement in the parks will probably not have similar effects as those observed in Plainsville. Moreover, Alecia Yu was already in the chair of the mayor and therefore, such an action cannot be assumed to have similar results for Ida McAllister as she is running for the mayor. One cannot refute the fact that her competitors will do their level best to highlight all the negative aspects of such an action in order to succeed in the race to become the mayor of Lake City.

because the argument provide several unwarranted assumptions that it fails to make any convincing case about the fact that Lake city is definitely will follow the success of other place like Plainsville without any investigation about the similarity between two theses cities.

In the end you should provide some cogent arguments which will bolster the arguer point.
In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. The argument could have been strengthened by providing evidence that proved that Lake City is plagued by pollution problems and that the citizens of Lake City will largely benefit from the action that has been recommended, thereby affecting the vote bank of Ida McAllister in the run for the town's mayor. Moreover, there is a need to discuss and eliminate the factors, other than environmental causes, that will determine what the people are looking for in their mayor.

because the argument provide several unwarranted assumptions that it fails to make any convincing case about the fact that Lake city is definitely will follow the success of other place like Plainsville without any investigation about the similarity between two theses cities.

In the end you should provide some cogent arguments which will bolster the arguer point.
In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. The argument could have been strengthened by providing evidence that proved that Lake City is plagued by pollution problems and that the citizens of Lake City will largely benefit from the action that has been recommended, thereby affecting the vote bank of Ida McAllister in the run for the town's mayor. Moreover, there is a need to discuss and eliminate the factors, other than environmental causes, that will determine what the people are looking for in their mayor.

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