This is a question in an English club which I joined the other day.
Please give advices about grammar, vocabularies,....
Any ideas would be aprreciated.
There are many factors which can change a person's personality. There are also many experienced things will be able to change a person's thought. I believe it is true because I am a totally different person than I used to be five years ago.
After graduating the college, I joined the company which specialized in polishing LED glass. My position was in charge of managing inventory for both domestic and oversea corporations. I worked twelve hours a day with only one day off on weekend in five consecutive years. Even though the job really challenged me enough, I still felt so hard to keep on that job. I had no time to go out with friends, to go shopping, to do what I wanted to do. I was just like a working machine day after day. Rarely, I had two days off on weekend and I started feel lonely. I didn't know what to do or where to go on those days. I can say that I was an introversive person. I was afraid to meet new people or to challenge the new things in my life. I still remember there was a period of time that I just hoped some accidents would happen to end my life.
Then, one day, I realized that the life in my college' days was totally different. I used to be an active and very happy girl. I lost myself and I wanted to recall those days. I gave myself full courage to quit my high-paid salary job. After that, I went to United State-Los Angeles to start my new life as well as to improve my favorite second language -English.
My life in United State was more incredible then I thought. During my school days, I met people all over the world. After classes, we went to the beach to have conversations in English as practicing. I learned too much about the culture, the people in other countries. Of course, like other people, I felt culture-shock when living there at the first time. Then, the fact of culture-shock made me more open-minded and more flexible to accept other people's ideas. One year studying in the US has completely changed my personality as well as my thought. I feel more confident to do everything including my present job and my hobbies. I now enjoy my life very much. I have a passionate concern for even little things such as directing foreigners whenever they lost their way in my city, or just writing an essay on Essay.forum, etc.
Everything in this world is the basis of 'cause and effect'. Sometimes, I think if I hadn't felt a deep sense of isolation during my working days, I would never have had a chance to study abroad and to realize my life is amazing. A little message for all the college students is that if you are confused and don't know what to do sometime in your life, just go outside of your country and challenge the new things. One thing for sure is that it would open your way in your life.
Please give advices about grammar, vocabularies,....
Any ideas would be aprreciated.
There are many factors which can change a person's personality. There are also many experienced things will be able to change a person's thought. I believe it is true because I am a totally different person than I used to be five years ago.
After graduating the college, I joined the company which specialized in polishing LED glass. My position was in charge of managing inventory for both domestic and oversea corporations. I worked twelve hours a day with only one day off on weekend in five consecutive years. Even though the job really challenged me enough, I still felt so hard to keep on that job. I had no time to go out with friends, to go shopping, to do what I wanted to do. I was just like a working machine day after day. Rarely, I had two days off on weekend and I started feel lonely. I didn't know what to do or where to go on those days. I can say that I was an introversive person. I was afraid to meet new people or to challenge the new things in my life. I still remember there was a period of time that I just hoped some accidents would happen to end my life.
Then, one day, I realized that the life in my college' days was totally different. I used to be an active and very happy girl. I lost myself and I wanted to recall those days. I gave myself full courage to quit my high-paid salary job. After that, I went to United State-Los Angeles to start my new life as well as to improve my favorite second language -English.
My life in United State was more incredible then I thought. During my school days, I met people all over the world. After classes, we went to the beach to have conversations in English as practicing. I learned too much about the culture, the people in other countries. Of course, like other people, I felt culture-shock when living there at the first time. Then, the fact of culture-shock made me more open-minded and more flexible to accept other people's ideas. One year studying in the US has completely changed my personality as well as my thought. I feel more confident to do everything including my present job and my hobbies. I now enjoy my life very much. I have a passionate concern for even little things such as directing foreigners whenever they lost their way in my city, or just writing an essay on Essay.forum, etc.
Everything in this world is the basis of 'cause and effect'. Sometimes, I think if I hadn't felt a deep sense of isolation during my working days, I would never have had a chance to study abroad and to realize my life is amazing. A little message for all the college students is that if you are confused and don't know what to do sometime in your life, just go outside of your country and challenge the new things. One thing for sure is that it would open your way in your life.
