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ESSAY:The chart below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
The first chart shows that there are seven reasons for adult education. The first reason, interest in subject (40%), is the most important; the difference between the first one and the second one is only 2%. The second reason, to gain qualifications (38%), is about 1,5 times more popular than the third reason. The third reason, being helpful for current job, is about the same percentage with the fourth (to improve prospects of promotion, 20%) and the fifth reason (enjoy learning, 20%). The sixth reason, to be able to change jobs (12%), is higher than the seventh reason (to meet people, 19%) for 3%.
From the pie chart we can see that the coasts of each course should be shared in 3 main parts (paid by taxpayers, individuals and employers). So, the quarter of gains must be paid by taxpayers. Individuals have to pay about 40% of the costs of their course, the rest of price has to be paid by employers.
ESSAY:The chart below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
The first chart shows that there are seven reasons for adult education. The first reason, interest in subject (40%), is the most important; the difference between the first one and the second one is only 2%. The second reason, to gain qualifications (38%), is about 1,5 times more popular than the third reason. The third reason, being helpful for current job, is about the same percentage with the fourth (to improve prospects of promotion, 20%) and the fifth reason (enjoy learning, 20%). The sixth reason, to be able to change jobs (12%), is higher than the seventh reason (to meet people, 19%) for 3%.
From the pie chart we can see that the coasts of each course should be shared in 3 main parts (paid by taxpayers, individuals and employers). So, the quarter of gains must be paid by taxpayers. Individuals have to pay about 40% of the costs of their course, the rest of price has to be paid by employers.
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